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Trickle Down

My mind Trickles down A lonely page Blank space remains I stay On the edge Whispering To the white I wait I pause Thoughts unexpressed Waiting On the sideline I wonder Who will fill My empty space Is it waste Is beauty In a pause Words not said Never read Held in mind Three words confined Dripped down page Done Trickle down free verse contest.

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Sean L Sanders

Date: 7/30/2013 3:25:00 PM

This is diffenently a winner. Loved it

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/30/2013 4:10:00 PM

Thanks Sean, I hope you are right.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/28/2013 7:26:00 AM

richard, I did my trickling poem and afterward, I read the rules again and saw I had done it wrong by using some lines with more than three words. Then seeing this one again, I thought I better warn you. "Is it a waste" Just take out the "a" and it will be perfect!!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/28/2013 8:06:00 AM

Thanks Andrea

Bl Devnath

Date: 7/27/2013 9:34:00 AM

Beautiful poem on trickle down, at the end only three words completed the essence. Love the style. Good luck. Loved always, bl

Laura Breidenthal

Date: 7/26/2013 4:06:00 PM

Pulled a familiar string, it did. Nice work! Always, Laura

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/26/2013 11:33:00 PM

Thanks Laura

Delysia Hendricks

Date: 7/26/2013 3:02:00 PM

lol. The story of my life!! I envy you guys who can come up with a new piece every day. I struggle for weeks on end to come up with a half-decent piece. Good one, Richard. Good luck in the contest, my friend. LIcia :-)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/26/2013 11:35:00 PM

Oh but it is so worth it your poetry is so good.

Cherie Thomas

Date: 7/26/2013 12:03:00 PM

Gosh I so relate lol sometimes seconds turn into minute into hours and nothing.....when forced its a struggle just to write a sentence....but I love how you compose this in a poem....thankyou4sharing:) cheriexx

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/26/2013 11:37:00 PM

I feel very thankful for the most part the words come out of me like a stream. I can not explain it.

Manel Gunatillake

Date: 7/26/2013 3:04:00 AM

Well done. Richard I did a poem for youk44

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/26/2013 6:27:00 AM

Thanks Manel, on my way to have a read.

Karan Patade

Date: 7/26/2013 12:16:00 AM

Love it !!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/26/2013 6:26:00 AM

Thanks Karan, nice to see a new face.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/26/2013 12:15:00 AM

ME LIKEY!!!! I sure wish something would come to me for this one!!!! (this is really beautiful too)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/26/2013 6:26:00 AM

I have no doubt you will come up with something amazing.

Poet Tacito

Date: 7/25/2013 11:45:00 PM

This piece is you laughing in the face of Writer's Block. Awesomely done!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/26/2013 6:25:00 AM

You have a way with words my friend. If I could rate comments you would get a 7

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 7/25/2013 10:27:00 PM

That's me many a night...staring at that blank page. Love this one. BG

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/26/2013 6:24:00 AM

Thanks Barb

Colleen Bono

Date: 7/25/2013 10:11:00 PM

There you go again amazing your readers. Good luck. I went to the er this morning. My ear is really bad. Have to wait till the 31 to see ear Dr. They put me on strong pain meds thank God. I can tolerate it for the moment. Goodnight. Love Colleen

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/25/2013 10:13:00 PM

I hope you get better quick! Hugs Rick

Eileen Manassian

Date: 7/25/2013 8:56:00 PM

HERE...here is what I connect to in your work. My own sentiments written by a different pen, and different mind....ABSOLUTELY amazing. Good luck! So many poems I've written...I keep...they never see light of day...I weep....the truth they contain...too deep...to be printed on page so white.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/25/2013 10:04:00 PM

I enjoyed writing this one. glad you like it.