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Trickle Down

My mind
Trickles down
A lonely page
Blank space remains
I stay
On the edge
Whispering 
To the white
I wait 
I pause
Thoughts unexpressed
Waiting 
On the sideline
I wonder
Who will fill
My empty space
Is it waste
Is beauty
In a pause
Words not said
Never read
Held in mind
Three words confined
Dripped down page
Done

Trickle down free verse contest.

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Sean L Sanders Date: 7/30/2013 3:25:00 PM This is diffenently a winner. Loved it Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 7/30/2013 4:10:00 PM Thanks Sean, I hope you are right.

Andrea Dietrich Date: 7/28/2013 7:26:00 AM richard, I did my trickling poem and afterward, I read the rules again and saw I had done it wrong by using some lines with more than three words. Then seeing this one again, I thought I better warn you. "Is it a waste" Just take out the "a" and it will be perfect!! Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 7/28/2013 8:06:00 AM Thanks Andrea

Bl Devnath Date: 7/27/2013 9:34:00 AM Beautiful poem on trickle down, at the end only three words completed the essence. Love the style. Good luck. Loved always, bl Login to Reply

Laura Breidenthal Date: 7/26/2013 4:06:00 PM Pulled a familiar string, it did. Nice work! Always, Laura Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 7/26/2013 11:33:00 PM Thanks Laura

Delysia Hendricks Date: 7/26/2013 3:02:00 PM lol. The story of my life!! I envy you guys who can come up with a new piece every day. I struggle for weeks on end to come up with a half-decent piece. Good one, Richard. Good luck in the contest, my friend. LIcia :-) Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 7/26/2013 11:35:00 PM Oh but it is so worth it your poetry is so good.

Cherie Thomas Date: 7/26/2013 12:03:00 PM Gosh I so relate lol sometimes seconds turn into minute into hours and nothing.....when forced its a struggle just to write a sentence....but I love how you compose this in a poem....thankyou4sharing:) cheriexx Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 7/26/2013 11:37:00 PM I feel very thankful for the most part the words come out of me like a stream. I can not explain it.

Manel Gunatillake Date: 7/26/2013 3:04:00 AM Well done. Richard I did a poem for youk44 Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 7/26/2013 6:27:00 AM Thanks Manel, on my way to have a read.

Karan Patade Date: 7/26/2013 12:16:00 AM Love it !! Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 7/26/2013 6:26:00 AM Thanks Karan, nice to see a new face.

Andrea Dietrich Date: 7/26/2013 12:15:00 AM ME LIKEY!!!! I sure wish something would come to me for this one!!!! (this is really beautiful too) Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 7/26/2013 6:26:00 AM I have no doubt you will come up with something amazing.

Poet Tacito Date: 7/25/2013 11:45:00 PM This piece is you laughing in the face of Writer's Block. Awesomely done! Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 7/26/2013 6:25:00 AM You have a way with words my friend. If I could rate comments you would get a 7

Barbara Gorelick Date: 7/25/2013 10:27:00 PM That's me many a night...staring at that blank page. Love this one. BG Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 7/26/2013 6:24:00 AM Thanks Barb

Colleen Bono Date: 7/25/2013 10:11:00 PM There you go again amazing your readers. Good luck. I went to the er this morning. My ear is really bad. Have to wait till the 31 to see ear Dr. They put me on strong pain meds thank God. I can tolerate it for the moment. Goodnight. Love Colleen Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 7/25/2013 10:13:00 PM I hope you get better quick! Hugs Rick

Eileen Manassian Date: 7/25/2013 8:56:00 PM HERE...here is what I connect to in your work. My own sentiments written by a different pen, and different mind....ABSOLUTELY amazing. Good luck! So many poems I've written...I keep...they never see light of day...I weep....the truth they contain...too deep...to be printed on page so white. Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 7/25/2013 10:04:00 PM I enjoyed writing this one. glad you like it.