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Treacherous Stride

Unsteady stride, feeling weak, deflates any thought of pride. I have to pull it 
together, find my stride.

Caught with my guard down, never saw it coming, the blow to my heart was 
painfully numbing. Feel like I'm stuck on a merry-go-round, going in circles, never 
gaining any ground.

I've been smitten by love many times in my life, but never before been cut to the 
bone by such a cruel knife.

Copyright © Jack Ross Jr. | Year Posted 2011

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Kevin Clark Date: 7/22/2011 8:16:00 AM Great words of deep emtion. Great expression of loss Login to Reply

Don Johnson Date: 7/21/2011 3:19:00 PM Jesus mate was it a shiela or a heart attack, very emotional type poem. You will have to cast it off sidestep away, bad heart or shiela don't want to play, good on ya mate! Don Login to Reply Jack Ross Jr. Date: 7/21/2011 3:46:00 PM twas a devil of a Sheila, lol.....back when I was a young man, in Love over my head....she was a beauty, played with me for awhile..then she dropped the bomb. Probably best thing for sure, she never changed...Whew! Thanks for the comments mate, you are indeed an Aussie Gent, much appreciated.....Jack

Judy Ball Date: 7/21/2011 9:48:00 AM Oh I do so agree. Love can be so wonderful and so cruel at the same time. Strange thing. Great write here. God Bless, JB Login to Reply

Sara Kendrick Date: 7/21/2011 9:46:00 AM Those that have loved and lost will understand completely...Very expressive work..Glad that my work about my Princess gave you a chuckle but trying to get her to stop is not easy..Sara Login to Reply

Zzzzz Zzzzz Date: 7/21/2011 7:38:00 AM Yes, love can cut to the bone sometimes. I've been hurt by love in the past, as I'm sure most people have. You describe those awful feelings of love's unkind cuts all-too-well. A fine write. Regards, Robert. Login to Reply

Jl Sadberry Date: 7/20/2011 5:08:00 PM Smile, *^_^* “You Know Thus Far My Dear Friend, I Love The Depthful Passion I Find Amid Your Stirring & Heartfelt Verse = And I Agree Once More With Beautiful Linda-Marie Dear Jack In That Yesss, Tis Patience, Trust & Timing == Sometimes True Love Can Wield Its Blade Deep Into Ones Heart But *^_^* In The End It Is Love, That Shall Seal & Steal The Day Away.” === My Love to You & Yours Always, Jasper * Login to Reply

Linda-Marie Sweetheart Date: 7/20/2011 12:21:00 PM yes luv can be cruel Jack but also wonderful.. it is a matter of timing and chemistry.. feeling your pain in this piece luv.. Login to Reply

Paul Beadnall Date: 7/20/2011 12:18:00 PM You are similar to myself,Old Jack. So intouch with your inner emotions. Beautiful write, only hope that the person who has prompted you to write such a poem,gets their just deserts. Thank you very much for top marking and commenting on my poem "My last hour". Was hard but, as time goes by .. May i ask your age and your country. Regards and blessings my mate Old Jack. I`m 44 from Middlesbrough England Login to Reply