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when did my glance turn into a stare ~ sorry but i was with you there # am i just ogling or gazing can’t say ~ hard to know pining away # happens every time we’re face to face ~ my world transcends into your space Without Saying I LOVE YOU Poetry Contest Sponsored by: JCB Brul 27/02/2021 Syllable counter PS 17/17/17

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Line Gauthier

Date: 3/20/2021 7:08:00 AM

congrats on your top win, David ~

David Kavanagh
Date: 3/20/2021 7:10:00 AM

Thanks so much for looking in Line, always appreciated, cheers David

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 3/10/2021 6:23:00 PM

Congrats on a well earned win! Hooray for you!

David Kavanagh
Date: 3/11/2021 2:18:00 AM

Thanks Caren, was delighted with these monokus, cheers David

Carol Mitra

Date: 3/4/2021 5:07:00 PM

Excellent.....The last line is superb congrats on your win David :)

David Kavanagh
Date: 3/4/2021 6:17:00 PM

Heya Carol, I’m delighted with the placement, enjoyed this contest so much, cheers David

Sam Kauffman

Date: 3/4/2021 11:33:00 AM

So creatively done David. Love the push pull of opposites in your experiential set of monokus! Congrats and kudos! High fives and the tip of a cap! The last line of the final monoku is really sums up everything! All the best and best wishes to you!

David Kavanagh
Date: 3/4/2021 12:29:00 PM

Good man Sam, thank you for summing up my monoku much better than I ever could, it was one of those where ideas kept coming as I was writing, so in the end turned into a triptych, we can never know for sure where a poem will lead us once we start, cheers David

Gary Radice

Date: 3/4/2021 5:09:00 AM

I don't know David; you wait for one great Monoku and three come along at the same time. ..does this count as 3 wins? :)

David Kavanagh
Date: 3/4/2021 5:42:00 AM

Ha ha yeah such is life Gary, like waiting on a bus, and that’s exactly what happened, 3 wins that’ll be a good day for me, cheers David

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 3/4/2021 2:57:00 AM

- Congratulations on your win ... all three are lovely written, David :) - // Anne-Lise :)

David Kavanagh
Date: 3/4/2021 3:52:00 AM

Heya Anne Lise, 3 for the price of 1, great when it happens, I’m delighted with the placement, cheers David

Alexis Y.

Date: 3/3/2021 9:58:00 PM

Hi David, Each one sounds like love to me. Congratulations on your 1st place win. It was well deserved:-) Alexis

David Kavanagh
Date: 3/4/2021 12:54:00 AM

Heya Alexis Staring into space unable to concentrate a sure sign of love, I’m delighted to get a great placement in this contest, cheers David

Brian Sambourne

Date: 3/3/2021 7:22:00 PM

All winners, David. Your poetic imagination is finely tuned indeed. Cheers Brian

David Kavanagh
Date: 3/3/2021 8:23:00 PM

Heya Brian Thank you so much, funny I had written the first one, but then 2 more suddenly appear as I was reading over, so true to form I stacked them in, I’m delighted with the placement cheers David

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/28/2021 7:46:00 PM

hey you did thrice as nice. So nicely done. I tried to comment on your tanka too but captcha would not work for me

David Kavanagh
Date: 2/28/2021 8:24:00 PM

Heya Andrea, yeah I was in caught up in the moment and 3 popped out, totally unplanned, thanks so much for for looking in, and trying to comment on my tanka, that resident soup poltergeist must be playing up again, it happens from time to time, cheers David