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Train Track To Abstract

Asp! I can see I am not going to be on time? That's a fact! I am late, and must wait, while a gate holds me back from the tracks! What a pain is the train dashing by!.. Rolling on at a pace of a snail in a race I am bracing to stifle a yawn All that freight, makes a pass while my eyes try to grasp graffiti that is now flashing by.. On the side of each car is a scar that was splashed by a guy with a message to send.. It departs 'round the bend So the gallery ends.. Farewell to the art from a friend... I am late... but the wait was a blast!
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Wigley Avatar
July 15, 2015 at 10:38 PM
Love the train rythmn to this write, Carrie. Well done. Viv x
A   Avatar
July 15, 2015 at 1:45 AM
Carrie, Congrats on your win. Always & Forever ~LINDA~
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July 14, 2015 at 12:10 AM
Carrie, Congratulations on your sweet win. Love SKAT
Allison Avatar
July 13, 2015 at 12:45 PM
so creative Carrie many congrats on your win:-) hugs jan xx
Nance Avatar
July 13, 2015 at 8:54 AM
I'm a sucker for graffiti art. This was a perfectly painted pictured and a welcomed ride. Nicely done.
Harper Avatar
January 16, 2014 at 6:03 PM
Rich texture conveyed, you capture the experience and moment well, Carrie.
A   Avatar
November 18, 2013 at 7:03 PM
Carrie, , Awesome free verse... xox~ Linda,
Puddifoot Avatar
November 18, 2013 at 4:59 PM
yes, as andrea says, it has a certain lyrical quality, as so many of your pieces do; some nice subtle rhyme within it - congrats on a well deserved win! :)
Sirak Avatar
November 18, 2013 at 7:44 AM
Oh I love watching train graffiti. Some of it is amazing. Congrats on your win.
Lamoureux Avatar
November 17, 2013 at 7:58 PM
I really like this one! Congratulations.
Gorelick Avatar
November 17, 2013 at 7:10 PM
I have a love hate relationship with graffiti..such talent gone to waste. Love your poem..who would have thought of writing about this...congrats. BG
Dietrich Avatar
November 17, 2013 at 6:08 PM
carrie, I sure never guessed this one belonged to you. It has such a lyrical quality to it for a free verse. I love the little story inside this one. Such a cool poem! Congrats on your win in my contest.
Jones Avatar
August 1, 2013 at 6:55 PM
Isn't it amazing carrie!!!!!!! I have often wondered what happens to these talented kids or young or maybe older people....even....some of them are so talented....I enjoy it too and this poem..
Tacito Avatar
July 31, 2013 at 10:12 PM
I have a real affinity & appreciation for this kind of art. It truly speaks volumes what is created. Nicely done!
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