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Asp! I can see I am not going to be on time? That's a fact! I am late, and must wait, while a gate holds me back from the tracks! What a pain is the train dashing by!.. Rolling on at a pace of a snail in a race I am bracing to stifle a yawn All that freight, makes a pass while my eyes try to grasp graffiti that is now flashing by.. On the side of each car is a scar that was splashed by a guy with a message to send.. It departs 'round the bend So the gallery ends.. Farewell to the art from a friend... I am late... but the wait was a blast!
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Date: 7/15/2015 10:38:00 PM
Love the train rythmn to this write, Carrie. Well done. Viv x
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Date: 7/15/2015 1:45:00 AM
Carrie, Congrats on your win. Always & Forever ~LINDA~
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Date: 7/14/2015 12:10:00 AM
Carrie, Congratulations on your sweet win. Love SKAT
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Date: 7/13/2015 12:45:00 PM
so creative Carrie many congrats on your win:-) hugs jan xx
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Date: 7/13/2015 8:54:00 AM
I'm a sucker for graffiti art. This was a perfectly painted pictured and a welcomed ride. Nicely done.
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Date: 1/16/2014 6:03:00 PM
Rich texture conveyed, you capture the experience and moment well, Carrie.
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Date: 11/18/2013 7:03:00 PM
Carrie, , Awesome free verse... xox~ Linda,
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Date: 11/18/2013 4:59:00 PM
yes, as andrea says, it has a certain lyrical quality, as so many of your pieces do; some nice subtle rhyme within it - congrats on a well deserved win! :)
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Date: 11/18/2013 7:44:00 AM
Oh I love watching train graffiti. Some of it is amazing. Congrats on your win.
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Date: 11/17/2013 7:58:00 PM
I really like this one! Congratulations.
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Date: 11/17/2013 7:10:00 PM
I have a love hate relationship with graffiti..such talent gone to waste. Love your poem..who would have thought of writing about this...congrats. BG
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Date: 11/17/2013 6:08:00 PM
carrie, I sure never guessed this one belonged to you. It has such a lyrical quality to it for a free verse. I love the little story inside this one. Such a cool poem! Congrats on your win in my contest.
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Date: 8/1/2013 6:55:00 PM
Isn't it amazing carrie!!!!!!! I have often wondered what happens to these talented kids or young or maybe older people....even....some of them are so talented....I enjoy it too and this poem..
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Date: 7/31/2013 10:12:00 PM
I have a real affinity & appreciation for this kind of art. It truly speaks volumes what is created. Nicely done!
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