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Originally published: 11th July 2020

Image by Malachi M from Pixabay

This poem was placed 1st = in Brian Strand's "COMPLETELY NEW" (8) Poetry Contest.


 

Lit up with the power to attract and excite And framed by a window of the toy shop that night A miniature world of trains, bridges and hills Came alive and then melted the cold winter's chills. There were signals that moved and tables that turned And lights in the engines as if coal had been burned. Frustrated by others who had gathered there too I pushed them aside for a much better view. I stood there transfixed and stared through the glass At the landscape of plaster and fields of fake grass. I watched as the locos passed by on the track To then vanish through tunnels somewhere at the back. There were small plastic figures all standing in line Frozen on platforms and frozen in time. They weren't duly bothered they'd missed the last train Safe in the knowledge it would be round again. Christmas was near and if things worked out right I'd be getting a train set on Christmas Eve night. But I let out a sigh before turning to go. I had already asked.. ..And my wife had said "No"

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Date: 5/22/2021 6:33:00 AM
Delightful, evocative images of a world that, sadly, most women (in particular: wives) do not understand. Should we bless them for keeping us on (or off) track. Thanks for these entertaining verses, Gary.
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Gary Radice
Date: 5/22/2021 7:54:00 AM
I always wanted a train set as a child yet when I received one it looked nothing like the massive layout shown on a Hornby advert. Looking at the price of the locos these days maybe the best thing to do is to dream. Thanks Geoffrey for your visit and comments. I / We can still dream. :) Cheers - Gary
Date: 11/21/2020 12:03:00 AM
This poem really made me smile.. how often those little 'childishness' in us pops up and most of the time they are rejected too... Just read this poem as it was mailed to me. Well penned. Have a great day Gary! ~ Ani
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Gary Radice
Date: 11/21/2020 12:38:00 AM
Hi Ani! I'm so glad my poem made you smile. The idea that there is a child in all of us crops up in several of my poems. Thanks again. Cheers - Gary
Date: 11/20/2020 9:59:00 PM
Hi Gary! What a fun poem! You describe the toy train so well I could easily picture it. I like how you lead us into thinking the speaker is a kid and then surprise us with the ending that he’s a grown, married man. I enjoyed this and all the other poems that came in my email today. Congrats on your lifetime membership.
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Gary Radice
Date: 11/20/2020 11:19:00 PM
Hi Jennifer! Thanks so much for your lovely comments. It's very much appreciated. Cheers - Gary
Date: 11/20/2020 5:33:00 PM
I really enjoyed reading this poem. It reminded me of the scene in the classic christmas movie where tiny Tim was watching the toys through the shop window. I also had a good chuckle at your wife saying no. Boys and their toys eh? ;-) Beautifully written!
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Gary Radice
Date: 11/20/2020 11:23:00 PM
Thank you Anne for your lovely comments. What a great scene that was with tiny Tim. I remember as a child wanting a train set after seeing a very large layout in the shop window of Hobbies in Liverpool, UK. Yet, the wanting and dreaming of getting one was actually much better than the eventual receiving of one several years later. :) Cheers - Gary
Date: 11/20/2020 12:19:00 PM
Gary: This lovely work brought a tear. The last time I pleaded, she said: "If we buy a train it goes to the great grandson." It seems 80 is to old for fun. ;o( Thanks for sharing a good time with all of us on the soup. oldbuck
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Gary Radice
Date: 11/20/2020 12:35:00 PM
My pleasure Old buck. I'm so glad you identified with me :) ..and hey..we're never too old! :) Cheers - Gary
Date: 11/20/2020 9:31:00 AM
Humorously sweet! Everyone has a soft spot for a childhood toy. Congrats on your win!
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Gary Radice
Date: 11/20/2020 10:48:00 AM
Thank you Kavira. I honestly believe that I'm 'growing down' :) Cheers - Gary
Date: 7/16/2020 9:57:00 AM
Wonderful. Congrats on your win!
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Gary Radice
Date: 7/16/2020 10:28:00 AM
Patri, thanks so much for your comments. I hope you enjoyed the ride. :) Cheers. Gary.
Date: 7/15/2020 3:39:00 PM
Should have bought it anyway for yourself with a signed card saying love Santa this is for being a good boy this year Choo, Choo
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Christopher Flaherty
Date: 7/15/2020 5:30:00 PM
Choo , Choo lucky you hope or trust you enjoyed the ride .
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Gary Radice
Date: 7/15/2020 4:35:00 PM
The lovely jumper made up for it and I just lied about the jumper bit.
Date: 7/14/2020 11:08:00 PM
Your ending has left me laughing at the the railroad crossing! I love your train poems, Gary. Christmas is coming - maybe Santa will relent! Christmas is about miracles. Congratulations.
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Gary Radice
Date: 7/15/2020 3:28:00 AM
Thanks Sam :) I have a certain affinity with trains - I must have, I've written several poems about them in the last 9 months. :) Cheers Gary
Date: 7/12/2020 12:40:00 PM
Gary, this is a GREAT poem--so skillfully written, telling an appealing story. Then your WIFE said NO. LOL! CONGRATS on your well-deserved win. Janice
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Gary Radice
Date: 7/12/2020 1:09:00 PM
Thanks Janice! I'm building up to ask for a Scalextric (slot car racing) set this year. but not holding my breath :) Cheers Gary
Date: 7/12/2020 11:10:00 AM
Congratulations Gary. I'm proud to get my "training" from you. Have a great day!
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Gary Radice
Date: 7/12/2020 11:21:00 AM
Cheers Bryan for reading 'between the lines!' :)
Date: 7/11/2020 7:38:00 AM
I love this Gary! Nicely done! Something in many a man’s heart loves trains.
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Gary Radice
Date: 7/11/2020 8:38:00 AM
Hi Kim! Thanks so much for stopping by and reading. I really appreciate your kind comments and you are so right about something in many a man's heart. :) Cheers, Gary