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Terrible tornados toppled trees tearing trenches through the terrain, “Took my tonsils,” told Timmy Thompson, “like taking a tongue twister train.”

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011




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Date: 10/30/2011 8:00:00 AM
A bit like the cut of the Haiku, Charles is teaching us about. In fact, this could be shorten into a great Haiku. I hope you don't mind the well intended critique. If so I will refrain in the future. Agape, Moses
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Date: 10/30/2011 7:59:00 AM
Top line was going well Tony... the bottom...if I could offer a little personal constructive criticism...becomes a bit far fetched, Okay? The top line though is immaculate Alliteration, the bottom line stands alone in its own Alliteration. Both are good, but don't fit well together in the same Alliteration. cont...
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Date: 10/15/2011 4:15:00 PM
You sure know how to inject the humor. Such fun to enjoy!
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Date: 10/12/2011 11:02:00 AM
Very well done Tony. I can't help but to re-read it, however difficult it may be. Robert
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Date: 10/5/2011 7:28:00 PM
Smile, nice one Tony. The best to you. Agape, Moses
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Date: 10/3/2011 6:02:00 PM
i see the twist aint been mist, the turkey twaddles round town, on ya cobber...
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Date: 10/3/2011 4:45:00 PM
What a great tongue twister. Good job Tony. God Bless, :) JB :)
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Date: 10/3/2011 3:46:00 PM
LOL, wow, I can't say that even slowly : )
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Date: 10/3/2011 1:32:00 PM
my tongue is tied up, tony! :) huggs, nette
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Date: 10/3/2011 9:36:00 AM
Good one, Tony! Kim
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