Too Much Frosting

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I believe a Poem's words and flow should match the character of the poem. A person who lacks education rarely uses high falutin' language. I wanted the words, and rhythm to match the image of the person. Seeking Love, not needing a "Painted Doll." And having poor language skills. Hardworking, but proud, in that he has a Suit to wear.

Romance me with a cup of coffee A sandwich of grilled cheese I don’t need glitz and glam I wear coveralls with worn knees My hands are rough and cracked A danger to fine cloth Dress in denim and cotton To me, that is fine enough I have one blue suit I wear it twice a year Bib overalls are just part of my work gear Dad was not around very long Exited when my Mother put me to sleep with a song My mother and I lived plain Ate potatoes that we grew I don’t need a servant Or someone to keep the sofa warm I need a woman even without a perm And we will be together until age takes one of us away Will you take a chance on me? I’ll take a chance on you Our proof that we are right for each other will be verified when we hold hands. As one of us breathes our last breath and is buried in the land.

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