Too Close To The Edge Ready To Scream

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In the silence of the night, a soul in turmoil rests, Too close to the edge, where the breaking point tests. A symphony of chaos, a mind about to crack, Yearning to scream, but courage it does lack. Stressed to the max, burdened with heavy chains, Heart pounding loudly, as despair remains. At the cliff's edge, gazing into the abyss deep, A fragile spirit struggles, longing for peaceful sleep. The weight of the world upon fragile shoulders, Dark clouds gather, as doubt smolders. Yet in the darkness, a flicker of light, A glimmer of hope, shining ever so bright. Courage rises from the depths of despair, Whispers of strength fill the troubled air. Too close to the edge, but not too far gone, For in the depths of struggle, a new dawn is born.

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Valsa George

Date: 6/27/2024 10:49:00 PM

We feel sometimes drowning in the depths of despair. Standing on the edge of the cliff, thoughts of ending life can come into the mind. But a gleam of hope when suddenly comes, it may show us new dimensions of life. This is a beautiful and powerful poem, dear Sara.

Sara Kendrick
Date: 6/28/2024 4:44:00 AM

Why, thank you, Valsa. I appreciate you taking the time to read my work and give me such a nice review. I am delighted you liked it. Sara K

Yann Rolland

Date: 5/20/2024 1:14:00 AM

a powerful poem, a lesson of courage and enlightning write, tahnks Sara

Sara Kendrick
Date: 6/28/2024 4:43:00 AM

Yann, I appreciate the time spent here and the kind review. Sara K

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 5/19/2024 9:55:00 AM

What a powerful write. Life can put us, "Too close to the edge, where the breaking point tests." I enjoyed reading this one. Have A Blessed Day Writing Away..........

Sara Kendrick
Date: 5/19/2024 12:07:00 PM

Why, thank you, Paula. I appreciate your kind review of giving me a blessed day. Sara K

Vijay Pandit

Date: 5/19/2024 6:02:00 AM

Turmoil of the mind, so well you conveyed Sara in these lines: The weight of the world upon fragile shoulders, Dark clouds gather, as doubt smolders. I like the positive turn in the ending lines--For in the depths of struggle, a new dawn is born.

Sara Kendrick
Date: 5/19/2024 8:59:00 AM

Why, thank you, Vijay. Yes, sometimes when that happens I find writing some poetry helps to rid my mind of all my troubles. Your visit was delightful. Sara K

Silent One

Date: 5/19/2024 4:19:00 AM

Your poem offers a poignant and hopeful message about the human capacity to endure and find strength even in the darkest moments. It captures the universal struggle with inner turmoil and the transformative power of hope and resilience. The structured rhyme and rhythm, combined with vivid imagery, make the emotional journey both impactful and memorable.

Sara Kendrick
Date: 5/19/2024 4:42:00 AM

Why, thank you, SO. I do appreciate the kind review of my work. Sara K