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Too Close For Comfort

TOO CLOSE FOR COMFORT

Mercury flys in golden winged sandals, 
making a dip in the suns blinding light.
Brilliant dark smudge to snuff out the candles, 
too close to the sun, to know that it's night.
In transit Mercury sails by in May, 
as a hot tiny black dot on the run.
On descending node, in orbiting play,
it waltzes with Earth and walks on the Sun.
Mars Rover once looked up and saw it there,
this cratered planet transit to a star.
Curiosity caught it unaware, 
and filmed it backlit in vivid d'ivoire,
First rock from the sun and planet to fly, 
a paparazzi deva in the sky. 

BY Edlynn Nau
© May 09, 2016

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Michael Tor

Date: 5/17/2016 12:28:00 AM

Great info like Paul writes and great write from it.

Edlynn Nau
Date: 5/17/2016 1:13:00 PM

He actually has a very different style, format,& subject focus but hey, I will take the complaint! I'm not sure a Sonnet Pro wants to be compared to a Sonnet Amature. I think this is my third sonnet EVER and didn't know Robert yet! I didn't know about Robert until after "Persephone's Walk" my very first Sonnet. We met through that one & "May She Comes". Then, we worked on the two sonnets together. I'm anxious to try some new things. What are you working on Mike?

Paul Callus

Date: 5/14/2016 2:58:00 PM

Thank you Edlynn for the info in the intro. Needless to say you did reach your task, that of putting it all in poetic words; not only, but also in beautiful sonnet form! The end line is the icing on the cake:) #7 Regards ~~ paul

Edlynn Nau
Date: 5/14/2016 4:46:00 PM

Thank you Paul! It is always fun to write about our "Skywatches" and then, see if I can capture the observation so that I hopefully peek some interest. Thank you for reviewing Paul! It is so nice to hear from you!

Constance La France

Date: 5/10/2016 9:39:00 PM

nicely penned poem, well done

Edlynn Nau
Date: 5/10/2016 10:53:00 PM

Thanks Broken. I know it is hard for free verse poets to read rhyme & vice versa...yet, we have SO MUCH to learn from each other (I feel)! Thank you for this visit and I shall be stopping in more often!