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Together Strong

I said to my mother, " together we are strong," mom bravely battled with illness for twenty years; but the end came and her life I could not prolong, I made the decision to pull the plug with tears. Mom bravely battled with illness for twenty years, never will I regret spending many years with her; I made the decision to pull the plug with tears, packed my stuff and moved in- and together we were. Never will I regret spending many years with her, we were always friends but became even closer; packed my stuff and moved in- and together we were, mom loved shopping 'till she fainted at the grocer. We were always friends but became even closer, first, a walker, then a wheelchair- then bedridden; mom loved shopping 'till she fainted at the grocer, I became her caregiver- with deep sadness hidden. First, a walker, then a wheelchair- then bedridden, but the end came and her life I could not prolong; I became her caregiver- with deep sadness hidden, I said to my mother, "together we are strong." _________________________ March 12, 2018 Poetry/Pantoum/Together Strong Copyright Protected, ID 18-1003-293-01 All Rights Reserved. Written Under Pseudonym. Written for the contest, Together We Are Strong sponsor, Silent One First Place
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Hamilton Avatar
April 5, 2018 at 9:14 AM
Congrats Constance on a great poem and win, the pantoum form I find difficult but yours was, smooth flowing and coherent not forced, and with a sad but great story.
Roper Avatar
March 27, 2018 at 6:28 PM
Like always awesome write , congratulations on your win, Broken Wings, enjoyed reading .. Have a nice Easter weekend :) Hugs eve
Neumann Avatar
March 25, 2018 at 5:11 AM
Sad, very touching and inspiring. Congratulation and respect (I believe that is your story). Very well done, Kai
La France Avatar
March 26, 2018 at 2:59 PM
Kai thank you for the congratulations and yes this is my story
Gauthier Avatar
March 24, 2018 at 11:21 PM
Very touching poem, BW. Congrats on your win.
La France Avatar
March 26, 2018 at 2:58 PM
Line thank you for the congratulations
Gentry Avatar
March 24, 2018 at 8:39 PM
Congratulations on your win with this heartfelt write that I certainly could relate to. My mom passed 6 yrs ago and it was exactly as you described it. It was my turn to be strong but turns out my strength came from her. Well written!
La France Avatar
March 26, 2018 at 2:57 PM
Susan thank you for the congratulations. Yes my strength comes from my mother and my father. I like to think I inherited the best of them
Messina Avatar
March 23, 2018 at 2:58 PM
Constance, such a beautiful written poem about your mom, sad-yes, but when put into such words- we can't help but to smile. As this reminds me of my mother whom I lost 30 years ago. Congrats & Hugs.. Charlie
La France Avatar
March 26, 2018 at 2:54 PM
Charles thank you for the congratulations.. 30 years means nothing for love is forever
Cunningham Avatar
March 23, 2018 at 12:45 AM
Beautifully told BW. Congratulations. Tom
La France Avatar
March 26, 2018 at 2:52 PM
Tom thank you for the beautiful
Barry-Nishanian Avatar
March 22, 2018 at 5:24 PM
"Deep sadness hidden". As caregiver...you too, needed a caregiver. You suffered more in different way than she. Self sacrifice spares one of guilt, knowing gave your all. Beautiful as poem, and as a model of life well given. Hope joy has returned to your life, happiness follows in time. bbn Big Congrats!
La France Avatar
March 26, 2018 at 2:51 PM
Barbara, thank you. It took a while for anything like joy to return to my life and some days are difficult still
Andresen Avatar
March 22, 2018 at 3:58 PM
- Congratulations on your 1st place in the contest, B.W. :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
La France Avatar
March 26, 2018 at 2:49 PM
Sun thank you for the congratulations
One Avatar
March 22, 2018 at 3:39 PM
A sad, but beautiful pantoum about your mum, and you know I love my mum and this form, so you did excellent.. Congratulation on your first place, we should all be there for one another, so we can all be strong..
La France Avatar
March 26, 2018 at 2:48 PM
Silent thank you for the contest and for my awesome placement
Haight Avatar
March 13, 2018 at 2:13 PM
So sad, but so beautifully expressed, Constance. I can so relate to your poem and your feelings about your dear mother. Best wishes for the contest. Hugs, Sandra
La France Avatar
March 14, 2018 at 9:08 AM
Sandra thank you for the beautiful. Yes so many have lost a mother, I think this is a pain like no other.
Andresen Avatar
March 13, 2018 at 1:16 PM
- I feel your pain, B.W. - A deep touching poem with real feelings and love - Best wishes in the contest, a winning poem quite sure :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
La France Avatar
March 14, 2018 at 9:07 AM
Sun thank you for your support. Someone asked me how long will you grieve?, the answer I did not hesitate..forever!
Ashley Avatar
March 12, 2018 at 9:07 PM
Oh so beautifully and sadly conveyed, Broken Wings, the sense of your deep devotion and your loving mother/daughter bond. Your poetic lines weep with poignancy. Best wishes for a win with your emotional and heartfelt poem..
La France Avatar
March 14, 2018 at 9:01 AM
Susan thank you for the nice comment. Yes my mom and me were very close. I never regretted putting my own life aside to take care of her as she was always there for me all my life
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