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October.15.2024
To Whom does This Come Poetry Contest
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Line of inquiry: “I am not the body, which is but dust I am not fickle and limited mind To whom then comes the feral thrust of lust Or for that matter, thoughts loving and kind"
I am not just the body which is a husk, Which will wither and rot in no time. I am the kernel inside that sequesters life. Neither am I a jumble of thoughts, Emanating from my fickle mind. I know my body is brittle and will turn to dust. Like a clam in its protective shell, My body is just an outer covering Where my soul is securely fastened. I am a triplicate of body, mind and soul I am meant to become whole… I must become whole. From the crippling outrages of lust, From the strangulating chains of ego, That bind me, I must set myself free. Perhaps this resolve has come to me, From incorporeal intuition and insight which hover, Unchained above the regions of reason And the cravings of lust and greed. When consumed by hatred’s fire and demeaning lust, I shall strive to make something new out of me; Something that will spark a ray of hope A flicker bright, a beacon in troubled waters. I will seek shelter under my Heavenly Father’s wings, Where his loving kindness awaits To fill hearts with bliss and peace. Within human frame, there is a constant war, Waged between satisfying transient emotions And for attaining immortal bliss and grace. One, the body presses, but the soul rejects The other, the soul presses but the body rejects. When hatred and jealousy sow their bitter seeds, Compassion and kindness bloom in quiet deeds. When hearts are filled with love and empathy, Weary hours shall sink to blend with quiet peace, And we will begin to think that heaven isn’t far away!

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Date: 10/21/2024 4:34:00 AM
Congratulations, beautifully written.
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Date: 10/20/2024 11:16:00 AM
The last stanza is my favorite! The poem is passionate and poignant! Congratulations on your win! And I also want to extend my sincere condolences.
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Date: 10/15/2024 1:40:00 PM
Dear Valsa, I believe your standout Lines are: "I am a triplicate of body, mind and soul I am meant to become whole… I must become whole." Mainly because it effectively encapsulates the poem's central theme and serves as a pivotal point in the speaker's self-realization. What a thoughtful poem exploring introspective themes of human nature and spiritual growth. I think you have demonstrated a good command of poetic techniques and successfully communicated complex ideas through accessible imagery and language. Excellent! Autumn Blessings, My Dear Friend, Daniel
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Date: 10/15/2024 1:19:00 PM
I hope there is such chance for perfection. How much do we drag with us, I wonder. I like your view better than mine. Time tells.
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Date: 10/15/2024 11:54:00 AM
The soul is the fulcrum of life. The brittle body and random thoughts are objects of finite things. Thus, the soul achieves what is great and lives forever as one lives in heavenly bliss.
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Date: 10/15/2024 11:51:00 AM
A beautiful spiritual poem. uplifting.
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Date: 10/15/2024 10:50:00 AM
I agree with you dear sweet valsa “ When hearts are filled with love and empathy, Weary hours shall sink to blend with quiet peace, And we will begin to think that heaven isn’t far away!” this, i wish would be more common in this world? And we will see that more often, you have an empathetic beautiful heart and soul my dear valsa, and i sense that from your poems, comments etc! You are a spark of light that illuminates so many hearts wherever you go. And , i would like to send my condolences, to you and your family during this difficult time of grieving, losing your elder sister must be so painful, and i can not even imagine what you must be going through! Just know that you are in my heart and thoughts today and always! Best wishes also for the contest! Sending you light always
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Date: 10/15/2024 6:22:00 AM
this is deep and wonderful, i am touched by the grace of the poem, with full of unknown hopes, thanks poet
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