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Trek poles wending
Peak ascending
Trail keeps bending
Effort spending
Gnats offending

Stormclouds rending
Cool rain sending
Flowers tending
Clean air lending
Sunshine trending

Now descending
Hikers blending
Smiles attending
All befriending
Hike soon ending

Sleep descending
Sweet dreams sending
Muscles mending
Smiles unending
Next hike? Pending!

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Jeanne Mcgee

Date: 5/28/2020 9:08:00 AM

I love monorhymes and you did a splending job on this one. One of my favs.

John Watt
Date: 5/28/2020 3:20:00 PM

Thank you so much, Jeanne! This was done for a monorhyme contest and was my maiden voyage in the form. Have you done many? ~ John

Robert Kinard

Date: 1/16/2020 7:46:00 PM

This poem is like a waterfall, it keeps you right on till the end. I like it. nicely done.

John Watt
Date: 1/16/2020 7:55:00 PM

I'm glad you like it, Robert. Thanks for letting me know! Happy writing ~ John

Hilo Poet

Date: 1/15/2020 3:29:00 PM

Tightly wrapped and engaging throughout John, and thanks for your participation, and my compliments on your placement~@wk

John Watt
Date: 1/15/2020 5:37:00 PM

William, thank you for sponsoring and for giving me a challenge to try writing in a new style... very fun! I appreciate the placement, as well as the time you put into judging all the entries ~ John

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 1/13/2020 4:45:00 PM

Sounds like fun!

John Watt
Date: 1/13/2020 6:26:00 PM

Except for the gnats! Have a great day, Kim!

Gershon Wolf

Date: 1/13/2020 8:50:00 AM

Love the progression of the hike and the rhymes, John. Really well-crafted. Good luck in the contest! Best wishes, Gershon

John Watt
Date: 1/13/2020 12:49:00 PM

Thank you, Gershon, for taking time to stop by

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/12/2020 1:23:00 PM

very very clever!!!! I love how the lines are all short ones too. Makes it enjoyable to read, which few monorhymes are!!!

John Watt
Date: 1/13/2020 3:02:00 AM

Turns out this rhyme had a lot of nice options that worked with the theme. Appreciate the kind words!

Winged Warrior

Date: 1/12/2020 7:59:00 AM

Well crafted my friend...but you used one word three times...just kidding John...don't listen to me bud...I'm just a time traveler from another multi-verse lol...thanks for stopping in on my Twilight Zone page lol...^WW^ :o)

John Watt
Date: 1/12/2020 10:42:00 AM

Wings, thank you for catching that, and for bringing it to my attention so kindly. I made some changes based on your input. You are always welcome to alert me to such things, my encouraging friend! God bless ~ J