To the Brim- For My Contest

 'He fills his glass up to the brim'
 She knows what happens when he drinks
 He's in an ocean and cant swim
 The more he drinks the more he sinks

 She watches sadly as once more
 He fills his glass up to the brim
 She's heard it many times before
 These "matchbook songs and gypsy hymns"

His  sad "eyes, where the moonlight swims"
 Never saw she had left that morn
 He fills his glass up to the brim
 All that he had left is now gone

 He stumbles outside, a sad sight
His "silhouette when  sunlight dims"
 Cast sad shadows in dying light
 He fills his glass, up to the brim

 1-9-2024

 1. He fills his glass up to the brim' - House of the Rising Sun- Bob Dylan

 2. "Matchbook songs and gypsy hymns" - Sad eyed Lady from the Lowlands - 
                                     Bob Dylan

 3. "Eyes, where the moonlight swims" - Sad eyed Lady from the Lowlands- 
                                   Bob Dylan
 
 4. "Silhouette when the sunlight dims"- Sad eyed Lady from the Lowlands
                                    Bob Dylan

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Date: 2/8/2024 2:03:00 AM
love it
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Date: 1/14/2024 2:25:00 PM
oh how nice to finally see your example. Well done. now I need to hunt for song choices!!
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Date: 1/12/2024 1:24:00 PM
Quite a lovely theme for the contest. Looks difficult to execute--but your chose good lines that resonate in this form. A form I really like. Well done, Joseph.
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Date: 1/10/2024 2:24:00 AM
A great poem, the product of snippets of song. You did well.
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Joseph May
Date: 1/10/2024 7:53:00 AM
Thanks Victor
Date: 1/9/2024 7:20:00 PM
' House of the Rising Sun.' A great song by ' Bob Dylan. ' This line is powerful in many ways: ' The more he drinks the more he sinks. ' You created a masterpiece, Joseph. My best to you. Hugs, Brandy
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Joseph May
Date: 1/10/2024 7:52:00 AM
Thank you Brandy, glad you liked it
Date: 1/9/2024 5:13:00 PM
Great example
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Joseph May
Date: 1/10/2024 7:52:00 AM
Thanks Eve
Date: 1/9/2024 11:30:00 AM
Good example for your contest Joseph, I have not had a look at it yet, but I love music and song lyrics, so look forward to it.. all the best..
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Joseph May
Date: 1/9/2024 11:42:00 AM
Thanks Silent, looking forward to your entry
Date: 1/9/2024 9:47:00 AM
Nice use of Bob Dylan's lyrics, Joseph. He's in an ocean and can't swim...best he might try "Blowin' in the wind' Best wishes in the contest! ~CM
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Joseph May
Date: 1/9/2024 10:16:00 AM
Thanks Charles, his answers are "blowing in the wind"
Date: 1/9/2024 9:24:00 AM
Well done, Joseph!
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Joseph May
Date: 1/9/2024 10:15:00 AM
Thanks Kim
Date: 1/9/2024 9:24:00 AM
Oh i love bob dylan, especially “sara” and also “ one more cup of coffee” are my faves! Good to see you use bob dylan references. And i love the way you’ve written this too. “ He's in an ocean and cant swim The more he drinks the more he sinks” that hits deep. Pleasure reading your work as always.
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Joseph May
Date: 1/9/2024 10:15:00 AM
Thanks Empress, He writes such deep lyrics
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