To M----

My true life value once laid with you
And the absence of you’re absence
Gave me happiness true
But the love you felt for me
Must have been fleeting
For you left me alone
Leaving my heart barely beating
Now you’re absence, like a devil
Is to my soul, slowly eating

And if life must end, may it with haste
For without you, life could hardly be called so
And without you, my heart beat is a true life-waist
So come me to my death-bed
The last place I will rest
For loneliness is something
I will forever detest
So please let me lay
Never again to see the suns crest

And rain seems fitting weather
For this time without you
Is the worst time I’ve ever had to weather
Yes, the clouds are a fitting metaphor
For the feeling I feel
And it feels the organ above my left lung
Has been dealt its last deal
And melancholy sets in, a feeling that is
Cold, hard, like frozen steel

And to give a consummation to my ever-blackening thinking
To give a conclusion to my dismal thoughts
As long as you’re gone, my heart will continue sinking
You’re absence is the gravity that keeps
The ship of my heart at the bottom of the sea
Yes, though you say it was no fault of mine
My ship still rests at the bottom of the sea
And though many people have tried, I know it’s only you
That can rescue my ship and me from the bottom of this sea

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011



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Date: 5/23/2011 4:18:00 AM
A warm welcome to PoetrySoup I offer to you Andrew. I wish for you the best in your writing endeavors whatever they may be. May you find inspiration by reading some of the poetry written here by other poets. Read and comment on their's and they will return in kind. May the sun shine on you that you might find great joy in your life. Love and blessing always, Carol
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Date: 5/21/2011 11:02:00 AM
So enjoyed reading your amazing creative poetry Andrea... very deep and emotional lines of expression luv..
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Date: 5/21/2011 9:30:00 AM
Interesting and creative expressions , Andrew
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