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For the 'Pie-in-the-sky' Poetry Contest of Suzette Richards

Types of Rhyme Used in my Tanka: Same Line (adjacent words in line 1)

Cross Rhyme f3 examples: from line 1 over to 2. from lines 3 to 4, and 4 to 5

Contest Instructions regarding Internal rhyme

USE ONE OF THE FOLLOWING 4 EXAMPLES OF INTERNAL RHYME IN YOUR POEM—a minimum of one example per poem (you may use more if you are writing a longer poem, eg a 6-line poem):

Same Line: Rhyme in the same line comes when the words rhyme in a single line—middle and end.
Same Line: Rhyming two adjacent words in the same line.
Separate Lines (interlaced rhyme): Rhyme in separate lines comes when two or more words rhyme in the middle of the separate lines.
End of, and Middle of Line (cross rhyme): Rhyme of the words at the end of lines and words in the middle of the following lines.

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hard–to-bear rare pain -
has come again and again.
I would give for health
my share of wealth not needed
so unimpeded I’d be

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Suzette Richards

Date: 10/8/2024 8:49:00 PM

Congratulations on your placement in my Pie-in-the-sky contest. Thank you for entering. Regards, Suzette

Linda Alice Fowler

Date: 10/2/2024 7:19:00 AM

Pain can be so debilitating and difficult to adjust. Congratulations Andrea! :)

Gershon Wolf

Date: 9/27/2024 3:19:00 PM

Andrea, Hats off to you for being able to follow all these rules and still produce a fine tanka! Have a fine weekend! ~ Gershon

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 9/27/2024 7:30:00 PM

Thanks . I had a better one and then realized it didn't go with pie on the sky theme

Paige Hind

Date: 9/27/2024 3:06:00 PM

I wish you well, dear poetess. I am sorry that you are in pain. :(

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 9/27/2024 7:31:00 PM

Thanks, Paige

Sara Kendrick

Date: 9/27/2024 2:58:00 AM

Good one. Cronic pain is not a good bedfellow for sure. I feel for you. God bless and keep you, Sara K

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 9/27/2024 11:11:00 AM

Thanks, Sara

Joe Dimino

Date: 9/27/2024 2:52:00 AM

I know...terrible to feel helpless...though blessed in many ways, constant pain is a bummer -- even small jabs, taking savage little bites of light from one's loving heart. I know firsthand how you feel.

Joe Dimino
Date: 9/27/2024 1:52:00 PM

Not the same challenge you have...but I know what it is to suffer physically/mentally seeming endlessly and alone. Blessings my friend. Did not mean to mislead you.

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 9/27/2024 11:11:00 AM

Sorry it has you too, Joe

Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 9/26/2024 11:28:00 AM

Hell Andrea, I am honored to be the first to comment. It is hard to bzatre any pain we feel in our bodies. Hugs. /Darlene/

Darlene De Beaulieu
Date: 9/27/2024 2:14:00 PM

Hello Andrea, i was hoping that those tests would have shown something. is there any research being do ne on this ? I hope there is and come to a medical cure. Hugs. /Darlene/

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 9/27/2024 11:13:00 AM

No they did lots of tests and can't even diagnose it. I now have empathy for those that suffer chronic pain especially when they did nothing but listen to a doctor whose meds got them unhealthy.

Darlene De Beaulieu
Date: 9/27/2024 10:05:00 AM

Hello Andrea, No doctor does not know of what you are going through! How to treat it! Wow ! I thought doctors knew what this illness is and how to treat it. Hugs. /Darlene/

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 9/26/2024 1:31:00 PM

not sure I got the meaning of the bzatre word. I am so healthy, but the effects are toxins that I guess my body refuses to release, and Prolia did something to my nervous system and my saliva. I think I'm stuck with these things for life and no doctor I go to has ever heard of these things. Such a bummer!