Time a Prison

Time – a prison

I see my Daughter’s life, spent in a time capsule,
locked in this prison, a prisoner of her own devices,
waiting for the phone to ring, to bring her to life,
to open the cage door, behind which she keeps herself,
hidden, setting her free for a moment, to run,
with living time, instead of locked up in it,
letting it be her guide, carrying her along.
The moment of life passes, time once again stands still,
as she reincarcerates herself, relegated to that void,
that pain filled space of motionless, lifeless time,
dead time created by, imprisoned by her belief
- in this conman, a man steeped in ********, in lies,
this imbecilic child in a man’s shell -
that it’s love coming from this controlling child / man
fated by, fuelled by the emotions of a child, my Child.

Oh !!!, to turn back the clock, if but I could,
teach my Daughters, they need not, should 
not follow, blindly, the footsteps of us who would 
send them on a journey towards self-destruction,
we, who guided them along without instruction,
we who failed them miserably!!!
That we, be their mother and me. 

B. J. “A ” 2
May 5th  2002

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013



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Date: 3/14/2014 9:02:00 PM
Wow. Heavy and deep poem of sadness, William. Sometimes a person doesn't realize they are putting themselves thru punishment, with whom they associate themselves with. Amazing imagery, and honesty emotion in this great piece. Enjoyable overall. Check out some of my poems. Might find some you like. Peace.
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Jiril Clemons
Date: 3/15/2014 12:11:00 PM
William. Trust me, when I comment on a poem, I'm 100% honest in my comments about it, this poem is no different. Also, we all have our own specific way of expressing ourselves through poetry. I was happy to visit your method of writing today. Thank your for your gracious comments on my work. Peace
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William J. Jr. Atfield
Date: 3/15/2014 11:01:00 AM
Hello Jiril Clemons : After reading some of your poems Jiril, seeing the degree of artistry, technical competence, eloquence, obvious intelligence and education displayed throughout your poems, I find it hard to accept such glowing praise as “ Amazing imagery, and honesty emotion in this great piece ” for my efforts and that you would find it “ Enjoyable overall. ”, and for all that Jiril, I am most grateful . “ Heavy and deep poem of sadness, ”, yes it was Jiril, watching my youngest. sixteen / seventeen year old, Daughter, put herself through all that my stuff did say about what she went through for what she thought was love and now, ten / eleven years later she has fond the real thing . Thank you Jiril, for your kind words . B. J. “A” 2 ( Bill . )
Date: 12/27/2013 3:19:00 PM
Hello William, . Hope you had a wonderful Christmas with family. -Sometimes I wish I could have done better with my kids. I wish you'd know that blame should never fall on us as parents. This is a very deep write...from the heart... xox...Linda
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William J. Jr. Atfield
Date: 12/29/2013 12:53:00 PM
“ Sometimes I wish I could have done better with my kids ” as I am sure, most of us feel from time to time, and without nothing but our nature and nurturing to guide us we can only hope to do better then the previous generation . “ This is a very deep write...from the heart... ” as I think ?, most of the stuff I write is and I do thank you Linda, for taking the time to pass comment on some of what I have put out there . You and yours have a fantastic New Year !!! Love Bill .
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William J. Jr. Atfield
Date: 12/29/2013 12:53:00 PM
Hello to you too Linda : Nice to see a word or two from you and hope that your Christmas was filled with loving family and friends and that Santa, gave to you, some of what your heart desires and your soul requires . “ Hope you had a wonderful Christmas with family ”, thank you Linda, and I did !!!, with both Daughters. Mandy, whom we have not had contact from in over nine years and Melanie, who the poem was about. The greatest Christmas present this one has ever received. So nice to see them together, just as they were when I raised them - as a Mr. Mom .
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