time

as the twilight bleeds
brisk reveries draped in gold..
my somber heart soars-
like frail fireflies gliding through 
russet tunes of drifting time..

feelingstimetanka

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Marilene Evans

Date: 11/24/2023 11:32:00 PM

delicate way to express feelings! congratulations.

Debjani Mitra

Date: 11/24/2023 10:00:00 PM

Aha...only a poet can see autumn beauty in so many forms

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 11/24/2023 9:19:00 PM

May those frail fireflies fly home to where the sun never stops and the moon never dies, Congrats on your win, this is splendid !!

Sam Scott

Date: 11/19/2023 8:51:00 PM

This is as cute as a button x

Valsa George

Date: 11/18/2023 8:40:00 PM

Wow....! Empress, you have a way with words and images. So beautiful and impeccable, sweet friend.

Silent One

Date: 11/13/2023 2:29:00 PM

awwww this one is a bit deep.... I hope your somber heart can find some joy.. i can feel the sadness in your words, even in a short form with restrictions..

Yann Rolland

Date: 11/12/2023 11:09:00 PM

time is such an abstraction, but so real , you find the way to explore this time, just the moment of an "extraodinary" and fill of grace poem thanks poet

Eve Roper

Date: 11/12/2023 10:44:00 PM

Wow, in a few words speaks volumes. Enjoyed reading my friend. Many blessings your way my friend.

Paige Hind

Date: 11/12/2023 1:21:00 PM

Your whole poem- each with its own light- so beautiful! Haunting in so many ways...

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/12/2023 10:03:00 AM

An amazing tanka worthy of a top placement! Thanks for sharing wonderful poems with us while leaving flattering comments to do many poets. You are a great addition to Soup.

Fading Star Silence

Date: 11/12/2023 8:40:00 AM

In just a few words, you convey so much..the emotions that I feel deeply, the imagery that I get lost in, the words and lines you weave, so truly divinely mesmeric! I’m so awestruck, my beautiful soul sis! I expect nothing less..always a work of art in all you do!

Sotto Poet

Date: 11/12/2023 6:34:00 AM

Dear Ink, your depiction of time in such a magnificent way is simply amazing. The exquisite expression, invoking imagery of fading dusk, brittle fireflies, and dreamy rhythms of drifting moments, is quite remarkable. Your description of fall, with all of its vibrant colors, is a delight to read. I truly enjoyed this Tanka.

Vijay Pandit

Date: 11/12/2023 6:09:00 AM

brisk reveries draped in gold--russet tunes of drifting time--splendid vocabulary as always, Ink. Much enjoyed the beauty you convey, my friend.

Clive Culverhouse

Date: 11/12/2023 5:54:00 AM

Such profound expression, twilight bleeds.. frail fireflies.. russet tunes of drifting times, excellent phrases thoroughly enjoyed

Sara Kendrick

Date: 11/12/2023 5:37:00 AM

Very descriptive of fall in all its glorious colors. Thanks for sharing your talent with us and for dropping by my page. Sara K

Lioness Onpaper

Date: 11/12/2023 2:31:00 AM

the twilight bleeds.. brisk reveries draped in gold.. mmmmmmm papi u got me hooked on the first line itself !!! my somber heart soars-like frail fireflies … oooooo that’s soooooo gorgeously written!! russet tunes of drifting time..An absolute beauty!!! Love these lines how they just flow so effortlessly

Hiya Sharma

Date: 11/12/2023 2:30:00 AM

Wow, this is such a deep tanka, with sombre tones getting soothed by the soft shimmering light of fireflies, drifting with time.. I'm loving your use of different colours here & also the imagery swirls so eloquently! "Twilight bleeds"," reveries draped in gold","frail fireflies gliding through" Ahh, just serene."Russet tunes of drifting time" I can almost hear those tunes coming alive in your gorgeous words.ahh, I need more adjectives to describe this, it's magnificently crafted with Ink's magic

Hiya Sharma
Date: 11/12/2023 2:31:00 AM

Your word choices as always are impeccable & thoroughly enjoyed reading this! Especially those alliterations are perfect adornments.. Sending you so much love :)