Tickling Fate

Fate’s feet wait for the moment,
Clinging to a blade of grass,
Like a tick clinging on a loment,
Waiting for the unknowing to pass.

Sometimes as high as the thigh.
More often as low as the toe,
Always seeking the mind’s eye,
With deft wisdom to bestow.

Climbing between layers,
Or simply rambling within view,
Tiny steps of these stayers,
Keep ascending tried and true.

Upward toward the head,
Continuing on the trek, 
Pausing at the last thread,
Finally reaching the neck.

Passing over skin,
A slight tickle might be sensed,
Thoughts begin within,
Subtle doubts form against.

A favorite place to hide,
Is just behind the ear,
Allowing proper time to abide,
Until one is finally ready to hear.

Written on 3/12/18 for the contest Fate's Footfalls sponsored by John lawless.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2018



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Date: 3/26/2018 10:29:00 PM
A charming poem, Michael. Congrats on your fine win.
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Date: 3/21/2018 8:24:00 AM
Michael, I enjoyed this interesting take on the "whisperings" of fate...it slowed me down and beckoned me to read it again. Thanks for participating in the contest
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Michael Vacek
Date: 3/21/2018 12:10:00 PM
Fate tends to sneak up on me and latch on at the last moment. The weakness of this poem lies in the experience of people. If you have never experienced a tick crawling on bare skin, the poem is hard to grasp. However if you are like me and meet up with hundreds of these sneaky crawlers annually, you can even feel them when they don't even exist.
Date: 3/12/2018 9:48:00 PM
Nice brevity, Michael, great analogy. super imagery in such concise lines.
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Michael Vacek
Date: 3/12/2018 9:55:00 PM
Thank you. Fate has always snuck up on me. I tried to conform with fate's subtleness and simplicity in my life.
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