Thunder Crashes

thunder crashes. . . . 
near the fireplace I inhale
rain’s scent in your hair

you snuggle
warmly in my arms. . . .
I taste your mouth


For Charles Henderson's
Short Short Haiku Poetry Contest
Copyright © | Year Posted 2011

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Martin Avatar
May 30, 2015 at 1:33 PM
Great!! Don't often give 7's, but here is greatly deserved!
A  Avatar
May 16, 2015 at 12:08 PM
nice and romatic
Stinson Avatar
December 1, 2011 at 10:41 PM
Beautiful haiku. Well thought out.
Johnson Avatar
December 1, 2011 at 1:10 PM
As I await loves tender touch. The moon shines up above. It braces me just like a crutch. As I survive the push and shove.
Guzzi Avatar
November 28, 2011 at 3:30 PM
hot hot hot! loved these 2 Andie congrad's on your win! Light & Love
Brown Avatar
November 28, 2011 at 10:47 AM
Congratulations on your win in Charles' "Short Short Haiku" contest Andrea. Love, Carol
Osita Avatar
November 26, 2011 at 3:39 PM
Many congrats on your big place win in the contest. Have a nice day
Williams Avatar
November 26, 2011 at 12:06 PM
Andrea congrats on your win, my apologies for the lateness as i thought i had already done them all..David
K. Avatar
November 26, 2011 at 11:17 AM
I am so happy to see this in the list, Andrea! I really loved this couple of romantic haiku :) Super congrats and hugs to you!
Poet Avatar
November 26, 2011 at 8:14 AM
Congratulations Andrea on your win .Very nice picture of romance you have painted here.Yeah I have done it!I am looking at an distant island.
Foster Avatar
November 26, 2011 at 12:51 AM
A cosy warm place to be on a wild night.Well done in making both relate so well.congrats...Margaret p.s. seasons of love. there's that word 'weird' again
Merryman Avatar
November 25, 2011 at 8:21 PM
Congrats on your win, Andrea. Warm and sensual. Kim
Marcum Wong Avatar
November 25, 2011 at 4:26 PM
Such romantic visions these offer and so happy to see them in the winner's circle Andrea. Congratulations! I hate it that my eyes won't allow me to read much. The computer glasses I bought are not helping much.
Arowolo Avatar
November 25, 2011 at 3:19 PM
Nice romantic Haiku,Andrea.Congratulations on your win...
D. Avatar
November 20, 2011 at 2:54 PM
go read jeffry cohan he is an awesome poet
Babcock Avatar
November 20, 2011 at 1:51 PM
You create a cute little scene with your two Haiku. love phyl
Johnson Avatar
November 19, 2011 at 12:39 AM
lovely haiku flows ok , words planned yet shortened hey, quite ok...
Horne Avatar
November 16, 2011 at 2:33 PM
love these haiku, Andrea - I used to think they were easy and then I realised just how hard they are
A   Avatar
November 16, 2011 at 2:43 AM
Hi Andrea... how are you?,, Me i love rain scent..but, not from the fireplace... this is smoking hot...lol.. well the ending line.... good luck in the contest... now i know what a short haiku is..lol... well when you stop my newest haiku's... i did it on purpose to do them all wrong.. but, i do want your input... take care,..p.d.
Breidenthal Avatar
November 15, 2011 at 8:09 PM
Beautiful poem! always, Laura
Sweetheart Avatar
November 15, 2011 at 8:01 PM
very nice imagery Andrea.. my best to u in the contest.. my hand is asleep so am typing with one finger..oh..haha.. have to laugh..
K. Avatar
November 15, 2011 at 5:35 PM
What a very cozy couple of haiku you have here, Andrea :) Leaves the reader warm and toasty :) Enjoyed this one, sweetie :)
Anish Avatar
November 15, 2011 at 4:09 PM
Nice romantic short poem! Hope you win! Have you entered the Poetrysoup contest as well? Peace & Love Matthew Anish
Fraser Avatar
November 15, 2011 at 2:23 PM
Being with a loved one during a thunderstorm sure has a wow factor. Good luck in the contest Andrea :)
Devonshire Avatar
November 15, 2011 at 12:45 PM
You make thunderstorms sound so romantic in your haiku, Andrea. I'm sure Charles will love it. I probably should just delete my entry. Can't get a handle on what Charles and Deb are seeking. Thanks for your comments on Sparrow on a Ledge. No, it didn't place, but it was based on a lady who lived across the street. Love, Carolyn
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