Thunder

deep n cold, dark, jaded sky, cobalt
dirty clouds, rushing, tumbling pass

beneath broken trees, skeletons reach
each swim n sway scratching the sky

they dance n twirl, nightmares 
silhouetted in hot light, strobes 

quick blazes flare out into the night 
leaving silhouettes burned in optics

in cones n rods, as neurons fire
the storm comes, thunder stumbles 

distant rumbles cuts through 
the silence, dark n deep, infinite 

images echo, light refracts 
shadows reflect, crisscross 

an angry, threatening sky 
the earthquakes in defiance 

under a bruised firmament 
tree limbs sway like skeleton dance

under the scorched heavens 
that wake the electric divine 

thunder drums as the storms come.

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Date: 3/4/2023 5:01:00 PM
Some wonderful images in this poem, I could almost smell that scent of a coming thunderstorm! You used the word "sky" five times- maybe try to vary it with different terms for sky? Very impactful piece, though, I love it.
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Date: 3/5/2023 5:47:00 PM
Thanks for the kind words, while I do agree about the repetition of the word “fire” . And I will consider using “different terms for sky”. I have to note there is precedence in poetry / literature for the repetition of words or phrases. Anaphora: Often used in political speeches and occasionally in prose and poetry, anaphora is the repetition of a word or words at the beginning of successive phrases, clauses, or lines to create a sonic effect. But, I will take you advice and consider, it. And rules are meant to be bent or broken. Check back to see if I change the word. Thanks again. Keep reading. Headed to check your work out. Peace! Thanks again…
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