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Me Dad fishing Mum's old tights over coffee jar towed along with a piece of string catching some unwary minnows in the strong current the water tinkled over the rocks, making a sound like a box of spilling pencils calm day sunny rush hour time people going home stopping, starting,controlled by lights we, cocooned within the shadow of the bridge above which contrasted in that moment how different the ways we can choose to live our days. Sun sets cooling, shadows stretch Poppies go to sleep petals closing, controlled by light with a nod and a smile he signals it's time to go I remember it was the one day in his whole life that we had alone together For contest 'The magic of three', sponsor, Broken Wings january 15th 2018

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Date: 2/13/2018 9:10:00 AM
Viv, congratulations on your win in my contest with this wonderful dreamy poem
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Date: 2/12/2018 10:06:00 PM
You did well with this, Viv. Fibonacci is not an easy form and you hid it well. It is a vivid remembrance in your mind. Congrats on a fine placement too...I really enjoyed your vignettes on the day with your dad.
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Viv Wigley
Date: 2/13/2018 12:20:00 AM
Thanks, Reason, a tricky form indeed. Regards, Viv
Date: 2/12/2018 9:57:00 PM
Congratulations on your win, Viv ! Enjoyed reading this wonderful poem. Hugs Eve ~`*
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Viv Wigley
Date: 2/13/2018 12:20:00 AM
Thanks, Eve, much appreciated. Love 'n hugs, Viv x
Date: 1/28/2018 12:06:00 AM
haha, just saw your counting syllables reply to me. Sorry I don't have time to search for a poem of yours to read. I believe I may have seen all your poetry! I STILL have not gotten to this contest. It's just not as easy as it looks , so good on you, Viv. You nailed it!
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Date: 1/18/2018 12:26:00 AM
YOu took the contest's title and wove true magic with the three stanzas of this great form. Oh, I hope I can do as well as you did showing this one special day with your dad!! Fantastic job.
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Viv Wigley
Date: 1/19/2018 1:27:00 AM
Thanks, Andrea, very kind. It's certainly a form that takes some work- if you had seen how many times I'd been counting syllables on my fingers.... x
Date: 1/16/2018 9:28:00 PM
Funny how just one special memory can be filed away forever because it was so special to us. Wonderful style that you've written to recall your special memories, Viv!
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Viv Wigley
Date: 1/19/2018 1:28:00 AM
Thanks Laura, when my young brother, who's handicapped came along, I got put on the back burner, as it were. Viv x
Date: 1/16/2018 3:59:00 AM
Beautiful and sad. What a lovely day to revisit at any time.
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Date: 1/16/2018 6:34:00 AM
Thanks, Jean, hope you're wellerer than I, with my flu, courtesy of my generous missus x
Date: 1/16/2018 12:08:00 AM
I can relate to this, a beautiful memory, only I wish had more of them!
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Date: 1/16/2018 6:35:00 AM
Thanks Arthur. Circumstances dictated he couldn't spend time with me until it was too late. Regards, Viv
Date: 1/15/2018 9:20:00 PM
What a beautiful and sentimental reverie Viv. I so enjoyed reading your lovely poem and feeling like I was there in the middle of it. What a truly special day that was for you and your dad. Just enchanting. Best wishes for a win.. ~Susan
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Viv Wigley
Date: 1/16/2018 6:35:00 AM
Thanks, Susan, simple pleasures and all that. Viv x
Date: 1/15/2018 2:05:00 AM
- Our lives will always be controlled by technology - Love that line with mom's old tights) :)) - Good luck in the contest, Viv :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 1/15/2018 4:40:00 AM
Thanks, Anne-Lise, a piece of stocking stretched over the jar and tied, then with a hole in the middle to let the fish in was a cheap, effective way for a kid to fish. Viv x

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