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This Dream Called Life

"For all life is a dream, and dreams themselves are only dreams." Pedro Calderon de la Barca

              The leaves change hue.
        I’m right behind. They fall to ground,
      and as they crumble, I’ll be crumbling too.
        Will there be souls around
  to hear my sound? I crumble, drifting down so deep
  inside this dream called life!  An awful wait I keep
    in autumn’s span of life’s short sleep.
  To waken from this dream I am not wont to do.

June 16, 2019
Contest: Writing Challenge, June 2019, Crumbling Rhyme Poetry Contest
Sponsor: Dear Heart
Note: by howmanysyllables.com "crumbling" is 2 syllables (as I count it) though another counter said it was 3.

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Frederic Parker

Date: 7/13/2019 9:49:00 PM

A profound poem Andrea

Nathan Karczewski

Date: 7/13/2019 12:45:00 AM

Very well written Congrats!

Charlie Knowlton

Date: 7/8/2019 6:36:00 AM

Beautiful poem Andrea…Congrats

David Drowley

Date: 7/7/2019 4:53:00 PM

Andrea, Beautifully written. You captured the slow process of crumbling so well. Congratulations on your well deserved win! David

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart

Date: 7/1/2019 12:58:00 PM

Stunning piece Andrea. x

Abdullah Alhemaidy

Date: 7/1/2019 12:11:00 PM

Hello dear Andrea. I think it is two syllables. Its etymology as I read it: From earlier crymble, crimble, from Middle English *crymblen, kremelen, from Old English *crymlan (“to crumble”), from *crymel (“a small crumb; crumble”), diminutive of Old English cruma (“crumb”), equivalent to crumb +? -le (diminutive suffix). Best regards.

Constance La France

Date: 6/30/2019 2:58:00 PM

Andrea, congratulations on your win in my writing challenge with this wonderful write, sorry for my delay in visiting ~

Jan Allison

Date: 6/29/2019 12:56:00 PM

brilliantly penned and I love the quote you used to introduce the poem, congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx

Early Jae

Date: 6/25/2019 4:27:00 PM

Congratulations on first! This piece is wonderful!!

Jeanne Mcgee

Date: 6/25/2019 1:19:00 PM

OMGoodness. This is a stunning piece. I had to read it several time to savor different parts..."An awful wait I keep in autumns span of live's short sleep" Congratulations on a first place. A lovely read all the way through.

Susan Ashley

Date: 6/24/2019 7:56:00 PM

Your poem is absolutely beautiful and so very worthy of first place, Andrea. A fav! Congratulations on your excellent win. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Joseph May

Date: 6/24/2019 5:24:00 PM

Congrats on your top win Andrea..

Kurt Ravidas

Date: 6/23/2019 3:34:00 PM

Oh, this is absolutely amazing and fave. I wish you a dream called gold)

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 6/23/2019 1:52:00 AM

I love the special way you melded life with the season. This is brilliant Andrea and I'm sure she will love it! It is a fave for me! : ) xxoo

David Byrne

Date: 6/19/2019 11:41:00 PM

Well I love the title :)

Rhona Mcferran

Date: 6/19/2019 8:18:00 PM

This is incredible... a masterpiece and a FAV! Brilliant work, my friend!! ;)

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 6/19/2019 10:01:00 PM

thanks SO much

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 6/18/2019 3:40:00 PM

"Will there be souls around to hear my sound?" I have never wondered this Andrea, and now I can think of nothing else.

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 6/18/2019 1:25:00 PM

Beautifully written! Hugs...Kim

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 6/17/2019 5:41:00 AM

Ah, you nailed it Andrea, its beautiful as it is right challenge, Have a wonderful day dear xo

Eve Roper

Date: 6/16/2019 9:10:00 PM

Beautiful poem, Andrea, good luck in the contest.

Sand Blown

Date: 6/16/2019 8:55:00 PM

life is a lesson...we are beings of a universe...let us evolve...ahalolol...

John Lawless

Date: 6/16/2019 5:42:00 PM

Ah, the enigma wrapped in a conundrum opened in a dream. Nice one Andrea.....keep dreamin'

Matthew Anish

Date: 6/16/2019 5:08:00 PM

In the Jewish prayer book it calls life -"the dream that flies away". I am looking forward to autumn - the Jewish high holidays and the football season! Keep 'em coming! Matthew Anish