This Changes Everything

There's a darkness in the tone
of the steps that you take -
Like subtle singularity for fools in your wake,
And wouldn't it be nice to break out?

For instance, I saw a star tonight...
It was mostly flickering and distant -
But a Strange stir was what sent
Potent chills from spine to toes and back:

And deep inside of me, from an
unprecedented Hollow in my soul,
That star called out as a request -
For help or justice, I do not know.

What I can tell you now,
It wouldn't take much longer than those steps
for the elapsed time to force a full collapse,
And wouldn't it be nice to break out?

For instance, I moved a stone tonight,
with nothing but my mind,
The powers were within, around, behind,
And every step I took it drained completely -

And completely drained my spirit
of the necessary evils
Which controlled my every action

And reaction, And Action, And . . .

There's a floating, towering hole;
A glorious glance, at least at first,
and a mighty sweep of hands
Took my feet from underneath me,
And vertigo ensued,
                           A meaningless

Strange
                                       Hollow
                                                                         Sense
                   of                          the                             Strangest
                                       and Stranger Yet,
         but
                                                       what we were.

And wouldn't it be nice to break out?

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010



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Date: 8/2/2011 3:14:00 PM
Congratulations on your poetry making it through round one in the PoetrySoup International Poetry contest Joshua. I wish you the best in the final round. Love, Carol
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Date: 3/23/2011 4:01:00 AM
Joshua, congratulations, a great poem:))
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Date: 3/21/2011 10:46:00 AM
Congratulations to you Joshua for your win in Catie's contest "Free Verse Frenzy". Love, Carol
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Date: 3/21/2011 12:46:00 AM
best cheers for the great win.. lovely content and form..:) huggs, nette
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Date: 3/20/2011 3:32:00 PM
Congrats Joshua on your wonderful success in Catie's contest.. excellent entry .. enjoy your win with luv..
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Date: 3/20/2011 11:36:00 AM
Congratulations on your BIG WIN in Catie's contest. Best wishes, KC
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Date: 3/20/2011 10:02:00 AM
Awesome poem, Joshua. Really like the way you described the use of mind power to move the stone. I, too, wouldlike to "break out." Congratulation's on your win in Catie's contest! Best wishes, Carolyn
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Date: 3/20/2011 8:09:00 AM
Good to see you near the top Joshua. Congratulations on your worthy honor in the top six. Agape, Moses
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