Valsa George Poet Tanka

Thirst

 sun spitting fire

hankering to be moistened,

the Earth gapes its mouth

dried up hearts thirst for love’s balm

that evaporates like steam.

Traditional Tanka with the rhyme scheme
5-7-5-7-7

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A Brian Strand Tanka Contest

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Andrea Dietrich February 19, 2022 at 4:04 PM This is really amazing both in imagery AND meaning. One of my favorites on the winner list. Congrats to you

JC Brul February 19, 2022 at 2:05 PM Back with congratulations. Excellent tanka. A joy to be read again and again.

Malabika Ray Choudhury February 19, 2022 at 8:33 AM Congratulations on your win. A perfect Tanka with such a unique theme! Love ~ Mala

JC Brul January 31, 2022 at 2:41 PM Perfect!!! My kind of tanka. Your pen never fails.

Anil Deo January 25, 2022 at 8:55 PM So much truth, so much feeling! Shalom shalom Sis

Rico Leffanta January 25, 2022 at 10:31 AM Desert people do not understand why the powers that be do not re-distribute shrinking ice bergs where they can cool and nourish the earth. Perhaps your tanka will enlighten? Aloha!

Vijay Pandit January 25, 2022 at 5:52 AM Aptly descriptive: Hankering to be moistened, The Earth gapes its mouth... So well written, Valsa.

Sotto Poet January 25, 2022 at 4:47 AM Work that is both descriptive and expressive is excellent. Nothing is more unpleasant than being thirsty and experiencing that awful dry sensation in your mouth.

Sara Kendrick January 25, 2022 at 3:15 AM Good work that is descriptive and expressive. Reads like a good contender in the contest. Way to go. Thanks for the visit to my page. Sara Valsa George January 25, 2022 at 4:24 AM Thanks a lot Sara for your gracious comment !

Tom Cunningham January 25, 2022 at 2:40 AM Nothing worse than being thirsty, that horrible dry feeling you get in your mouth. Tom Valsa George January 25, 2022 at 4:23 AM And to a thirsty man, a glass of water is elixir ! Thanks a lot Tom.

Victor Buhagiar January 25, 2022 at 1:19 AM Lovely Tanka, dear Valsa. I never posted a Tanka in my life. I believe I wrote one in four stanzas but not in rhyme. Your poem is so lovely but rhyme is difficult for me. Blessings. Valsa George January 25, 2022 at 1:39 AM Thanks a lot Victor for your sweet Comment ! I too am experimenting with new forms !