Thin Air

Reached mountain top, snow falling, getting colder, lost my rope, nowhere to go, but down, running out of food, no matches left, thin air doing me in. written 5-12-11

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Neha Sharma

Date: 5/24/2011 5:37:00 AM

nice one

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 5/23/2011 10:25:00 AM

Your poem reads well on the surface and could also be interpreted as our journey through life, James. I often think of life as climbing a mountain and we, like the matches, are exhausted in the end. As for Stardom, we're now reading about Arnold Schwarzenegger's transgressions and it makes me sad. I always thought he was an honorable man. Love, Carolyn

Caroline Cécile Delacroix

Date: 5/18/2011 12:06:00 AM

Ah, the perils of heights! :) Well done, James! Easy to picture. Thanks for sharing. Caroline.

Matt Hunt

Date: 5/17/2011 9:48:00 PM

EEEK! Very scary. You penned this well. R.M.