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The White Trellis

There in my garden on a white trellis verdantly climbs a honeysuckle vine, blossoms vivacious now are quite zealous, beguiling flora will hummingbirds find. Verdantly climbs a honeysuckle vine up the white trellis that's steady and sure, beguiling flora will hummingbirds find, tangerine flowers with nectar allure. Up the white trellis that's steady and sure sweet petals curl back in flirtatious drapes, tangerine flowers with nectar allure fragrant and flaunting their tubular shapes. Sweet petals curl back in flirtatious drapes, blossoms vivacious now are quite zealous, fragrant and flaunting their tubular shapes there in my garden on a white trellis. Susan Ashley July 15, 2017

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John Watt

Date: 3/14/2020 3:22:00 AM

You sound like quite the gardener! I love the line, "sweet petals curl back in flirtatious drapes", and your clever trellis/zealous rhyme. So many wonderful nature words paint a pantoum landscape of color and growth - verdantly is my favorite! Horticultural hugs! ~ John

Susan Ashley
Date: 3/15/2020 8:22:00 PM

Yes, I do love my garden, John. My husband and I planted an orange honeysuckle (beautiful!) and trained it on a white trellis on the back fence of our garden and voila!.. a few years later, the inspiration for this poem :) I relish your lovely critiques and I especially appreciate your appreciation for the trellis/zealous rhyme - that was a challenge for sure.. lol! Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Vladislav Raven

Date: 12/20/2018 1:54:00 PM

Hi Susan, another Pantoum to sing its song from your wondrous pen. Such a beautifully fragrant piece which describes such beauty. Here, you use the Pantoum form to its most wonderful extent. The scents and sights from your wonderful poetry come through. Your palette does paint such a colourful canvas within my mind, a living canvas, one I could step right into. This is a beauty to shine with all your other beauty Susan. Have a wonderful Thursday. Hugs....Mike. XX

Susan Ashley
Date: 12/20/2018 9:12:00 PM

My dear friend, I relish your lovely comments and your gracious visit to an older poem. Thank you for casting your golden glow of sincere sentiments upon my poem, my heart is touched by their warmth, Mike. I'm so pleased you enjoyed this Pantoum. Warmest wishes always my wonderful friend.. ~Susan

Paul Callus

Date: 3/14/2018 11:31:00 AM

Back to visit this lovely poem, Susan...and say hello to my Pantoum Queen:) The fragrance of the honeysuckle is still strong and alluring! ~ Warm regards // paul

Susan Ashley
Date: 3/15/2018 8:11:00 AM

Oh I like that title, Paul, your Pantoum Queen:)) Your return visit just thrills me, my friend! I'm so glad the fragrant honeysuckle lured you back.. its allure is hard to resist :) I hope you're having a beautiful day and my very warmest wishes to you always! ~Susan

Paul Callus

Date: 12/21/2017 7:35:00 AM

And yet another delightful Pantoum, Susan. This poem blossoms with imagery and personification, alluring hummingbirds and readers alike. ~ Warm regards // paul

Susan Ashley
Date: 3/15/2018 8:04:00 AM

Oh Paul please forgive my late reply, I cannot believe that your alluring comment escaped my attention.. Thank you for your elegant thoughts and for your distinguished and captivating presence on my poetry page. My appreciation, for you my friend, knows no bounds. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Caycay Jennings

Date: 11/18/2017 10:49:00 AM

Excellent, absolutely beautiful! Talent shines ... CayCay

Susan Ashley
Date: 11/18/2017 1:02:00 PM

CayCay, thank so much for caring enough to send me a soup mail with a kind and gentle nudge to re-think a thought... you moved me to find a poetic solution that strengthened my write, and for that, I am truly grateful. Thank you for your lovely, authentic heart and spirit my friend.. Hugs and smiles.. ~Susan

Caycay Jennings

Date: 11/13/2017 8:49:00 PM

As lovely as a breath of fresh-aired sunshine. A joy ... CayCay (sent you a Soup mail)

Susan Ashley
Date: 11/13/2017 9:24:00 PM

Thank you CayCay for the soup mail... :)

Susan Ashley
Date: 11/13/2017 8:58:00 PM

CayCay, thank your for your treasured appreciation, your lovely thoughts and your wonderful comment. Your kind words are gratefully received my friend.. ~Susan

Daniel Turner

Date: 7/16/2017 8:26:00 AM

I love honeysuckle hummingbirds and your poem, Susan. A beautiful pantoum!

Susan Ashley
Date: 7/16/2017 2:02:00 PM

Hi Daniel, thank you for your kindness. I love the Pantoum form with its lovely repetition. At some point I'll take a page from your beautiful book and try sonnets :)

Jan Allison

Date: 7/15/2017 7:51:00 PM

a delight to the senses Susan I love honeysuckle but sadly have never seen a hummingbird for real:-) hugs jan xx

Susan Ashley
Date: 7/15/2017 8:06:00 PM

Hi Jan, thank you for reading my poem and for your lovely comment. We have hummingbirds galore in our backyard. I tempt them to stay every spring and summer with feeders and plantings of flowers that they love. I hope you get to see one in your yard someday :)