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The Way I See

THE WAY I SEE

Rains come in torrent as the clouds burst
Time for the helpless hill is at the worst,
Its slope fails, land crashes down in a slide,
Exposing the scarred face ugly and cursed.

Days later, flushed in the sheen of the sun
Shining blades of grass sprout one by one,
Birds on rock ledges drink trickling water,
On ugly hill face I see nature’s beauty return.

The face you got isn’t for you a thing of pride
For your genes haven’t been on your side,
In many undoting eyes you’re an ugly girl, 
To lonely refuge you retreat hurt and hide.

The special way I behold you no one knows,
Glitter of your golden heart your face shows,
Like moon on rippling silent river your eyes glint,
On your ugly face I see the angelic beauty glows.

April, 28, 2018.
Contest : Jamie's Interesting Contest 3.
Topic : Something most people see as ugly but you see as beautiful.

Copyright © Subimal Sinha-Roy | Year Posted 2018

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Susan Gentry Date: 8/26/2018 12:18:00 AM Congratulations on your win. Well done. Login to Reply

Anisha Dutta Date: 8/23/2018 9:43:00 PM Beauty lies in the eyes of the beholder. Congrats Subimal to win. Login to Reply

Line Gauthier Date: 8/22/2018 9:08:00 PM Lovely, Subimal. Congrats on your well deserved win. Login to Reply Subimal Sinha-Roy Date: 8/23/2018 2:18:00 AM Thank you, Line.

Carrie Richards Date: 8/22/2018 2:53:00 PM I love the way you captured the theme. Indeed...beauty is in the eye of the beholder :) Congratulations on your winning poem :) Login to Reply Subimal Sinha-Roy Date: 8/23/2018 2:17:00 AM Thank you, Carrie for your visit and appreciation.

Pashang Salehi Date: 7/10/2018 8:09:00 PM My dear friend, "The way I see " is a beautiful poem; but the way I see it in a form of Rubaiyat has some glitches. In the first Rubayi, "cursed" does not rhyme with Burst and Worst. In the second Rubayi, same as the "return". Also, there is a syllable counter in PS... your Rubaiyat varies from 9 to 14 syllables, it must be the same throughout. PS has a good explanation of this type of poetry. Login to Reply Subimal Sinha-Roy Date: 7/11/2018 12:15:00 AM Thank you or your visit and for the constructive comments. I shall try to look into it.