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It has been awhile, since I have visited the grave; of my big sister, father and mother, and my sweet baby boy ! The path has cracks and is dangerously uneven, scattered are toppled headstones here and there; and damaged steps and rails, well, it is an old cemetery but it seems forgotten ! As I walk along, I recall the memories I hold close; of each loved one engraved in stone here, that I am about to visit ! Then, I am there at the once shiny black stone gazing, for it is covered with green moss and bird droppings; and I am filled with horror, oh guilt, oh why has it taken me so long to visit ! I walk around it, the moss is on both the sides and back; covering the scroll work and baby's name, the front has a little but not as bad ! Along the bottom it has grown up quite a bit, and I fall to my knees weeping, mom, dad so sorry; then, I feel hands caressing my hair, and mom is whispering to me, but it is not words of love ! but ... Come back tomorrow, with Dawn soap and a sturdy brush; and bring a buck for water and wear gloves, I lift my head surprised ! ___________________ June 18, 2021 Poetry/Verse/The Visit Copyright Protected, ID 6-1365-305-18 All Rights Reserved, 2021, Constance La France Written for the Premier contest, Surprise Me sponsor, Charles Messina, Judged 07/03/2021 Second Place

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Date: 7/6/2021 2:04:00 PM
A ghostly surprise indeed Constance! Congratulations on your win!
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Constance La France
Date: 7/7/2021 8:36:00 AM
Sam, thanks for the comment, my mom had a lot of sense of humour so I thought the ending would be exactly what she would say to her way too serious daughter, she could always make me laugh and thanks for the congratulations ~ love and serenity _Constance
Date: 7/5/2021 6:34:00 AM
Wow! Congrats! Thanks for sharing this... making me smile at your "surprising ending" which shows your "poetic humour." God bless you.
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Constance La France
Date: 7/5/2021 6:47:00 AM
Beata, thanks for the compliment and the congrats, I wrote it this way because my mother could find the humour in everything and made "serious" me always laugh ~ love and serenity _Constance
Date: 7/3/2021 8:27:00 PM
Surreal and absolutely captivating! Congrats on your win, Constance
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Constance La France
Date: 7/4/2021 7:25:00 AM
Seeker, thank you for the compliment and the congrats ~ peace and tranquility _Constance
Date: 7/3/2021 8:46:00 AM
Oh My God, Constance. I just love everything about this. A brilliant write with a shocking and humorous surprise ending that I truly enjoyed. Congratulations on your 2nd place win! ~Charlie
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Constance La France
Date: 7/3/2021 12:18:00 PM
Charlie, thank you so much for the inspiration and the contest and my great placement, and for the compliment and the congratulations, appreciate ~ peace and tranquility _Constance
Date: 6/20/2021 8:03:00 AM
Well written constance with a nice twist of light humor at the end :)
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Constance La France
Date: 6/21/2021 7:13:00 AM
Heidi, thanks for the compliment on my poem, happy you enjoyed the twist at the end ~ love and serenity _Constance
Date: 6/20/2021 3:44:00 AM
Wonderful ...
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Constance La France
Date: 6/21/2021 7:13:00 AM
Kai, thank you so much for the compliment ~ peace and tranquility _Constance
Date: 6/19/2021 2:00:00 PM
_Constance, Best passing of time for those who've waited. Finest brush strokes of love in this visit. -Richard
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Constance La France
Date: 6/19/2021 10:44:00 PM
Richard, thank you for the compliment and the comment, appreciate ~ peace and tranquility _Constance
Date: 6/18/2021 4:21:00 PM
A marvelous verse, Constance, and I, for one, have experienced much the same in the old cemetery where my mother is buried. My solace is that she is not there, only the remains of her frail, diseased body. Her spirit is soaring; her soul is sighing for her children to join her someday. Oh, how I loved your poem!
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Constance La France
Date: 6/19/2021 12:03:00 PM
Milt, thank you for the compliment and I understand the sorrow you feel going to the cemetery to see your mother, I am the same, so sorry for your loss. I wanted to write a poem that was sad and had a twist of humour at the end ~ peace and tranquility _Constance