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The Velvet Trap

No one
not even
the rain
has hands
as small as yours
when you shake your head
your hair moves like
the limbs of willows
and that certain
motion of your fingertips
can stir the well of my soul
your electric love
calculated to please
is like
a ring
of trees on fire
around a pond of ice

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Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 12/16/2015 11:24:00 AM

Welcome to Poetry Soup Johnnie! This is one site where the members are very active and many respond quickly. I respond if my eyes are not giving me a problem. I think your poetry will be very popular here. This poem has depth and is just the kind of poetry I enjoy reading most. I will be back to read future posts. I wish you a Mele Kalikimaka! Aloha, Connie

Paul Callus

Date: 12/12/2015 3:39:00 AM

Full marks for an impressive first contribution to Soup, Johnnie! This fits in nicely with high caliber poems that this site has on offer. Make yourself at home; let it be known that your poetry is available to read...by visiting and commenting on the works of others. Thank you for having stopped by mine:) ~ Regards // paul

Johnnie Hynson
Date: 12/12/2015 5:08:00 PM

Thank you very much for the warm welcome and encouragement.

Pandita Sietesantos

Date: 12/11/2015 2:40:00 PM

Hi Johnnie, this is such an excellent first posting that I enjoyed reading! I look forward to reading more of your work! Welcome to PoetrySoup and best wishes as you continue to churn out wonderful poetic pieces! Warmest regards and a score of 7 (which is the highest score you can get or receive)! Pandita

Johnnie Hynson
Date: 12/11/2015 6:25:00 PM

Thank you very much for your kind praise and encouragement.

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 12/10/2015 5:12:00 PM

Hi Johnnie, awesome free verse, :) WELCOME to poetry soup. I hope you have fun with this wonderful community. You'll find many friendly poets who are ready to support and give positive feedback. I will enjoy following you and your poetry :) We are Lucky To Have you. Enjoy Poetry Soup:) Your New Poet Friend @-> LINDA <-@

Johnnie Hynson
Date: 12/12/2015 5:05:00 PM

Thank you very much!

Skat A

Date: 12/10/2015 12:05:00 PM

Johnnie, Welcome to Poetry Soup. It will be a delight to read and become familiar with your poems in the future. As for now, I will greet you with the same smile others passed when I first joined the soup. Wishing you and your poetry the best. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here STARTING with me- SKAT :-) Please drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you wish. I would like to be your newest poetry soup "FRIEND" Hugs* SKAT

Johnnie Hynson
Date: 12/10/2015 12:40:00 PM

Thank you!