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The Vamp

Cunning were her noxious machinations, Choosing those who never stood a chance. Masterful projecting of temptations, Brilliant timing, her alluring glance. Naive innocence alerted weakness. Perfect prey, a rug beneath her feet. Wary of her charm, he played to meekness. Vamps are blinded by their own conceit. Love projecting trust her highest rated, Self assured to win this rueful game, But his insight unappreciated, Destined to dethrone this queen of shame. Midnight luggage packed as she lay sleeping, Daybreak finding him no longer there. Not his absence roused her ardent weeping, Rather, roles reversed and woe to bear. All her hidden plans, new beau, new city, Lost its "joie de vivre" without a chump. Debit card replaced by selfish pity, Catatonic stupor, being dumped. She was fooled, assured the man had fallen. Not a clue his quietly keeping score. Retribution silently came calling, As a sliding key beneath her door. Gene Bourne 02-19-14. Alternating Acateletic / Cateletic end syllables for variable texture of flow in this Trochaic Pentameter poem.

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Date: 11/30/2014 8:40:00 AM
Gene, your consistent, rather than vacillating, employment of mixed meter was excellent. I read it that way and the fluidity is impressive. You developed your story stave to stave appropriately...well, like a vampire I guess. This was superb and I enjoyed reading it. Thomas
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Date: 5/23/2014 8:23:00 AM
The Pentameter lines vary evenly throughout the poem. The first line is Acatalectic and the second is Catalectic. This adds subtle variation without changing the Iambic Pentameter meter.
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Date: 5/22/2014 12:37:00 PM
strong poem Gene, this roads been traveled but never written about as well as try some of the contests they are fun to do
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Date: 5/23/2014 6:41:00 AM
Hi, Fred. Thanks for the comment and advice on entering contests. YF Gene