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The Uninvited (Revised)

Bedded, supine, meditations probe. Blasted retinal blurs strobe. Fusion fuses non-images of nonentities cosmiconsciuosness merges, purges. Between beginnings, astral travelers ego remnants roam; escaping fusion, forming schisms, uninvited entities race down umbilical cords of light reconnecting, self trace. Reconstituted limbs paw, brightness blinds, blasted retinal blurs strobe..strobe travelers return home.

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Rebecca Pasco

Date: 6/8/2009 7:06:00 PM

This is definetly about a baby being born,that maybe was not wanted.am i correct?i believe so.Or a baby being born into this life from a past life???I GOT TO KNOW WHAT IT'S ABOUT!?

Yoni Dvorkis

Date: 5/17/2009 12:20:00 PM

Dang wish I hadn't spoiled the ending by reading your blog on this one. I had a friend who's mother was sort of spiritual mystic. She used to warn us about playing with ouija boards because of the risks of messing with the astral plane, which by my guess is sort of what you're getting at with the 'uninvited'. I love this poem. I love how it flows in this nonlinear fashion.

James Marshall Goff

Date: 5/15/2009 12:57:00 PM

yes, yes, I agree w/Denis ...the spoken-word is quite extraordinary...Jim

Denis Joe

Date: 5/15/2009 11:23:00 AM

I have no idea what the commotion is about. But this is a great piece of writing. For me it all seems rather medical. But that doesn't matter; 'What is it about?' should never enter the debate on poetry. The sounds of this poem are what are striking. There is a a great use of alliteration and the playing off between the high sounding vowels and the deeper sounding vowels, give this poem a real feeling of musicality.

James Peranteau

Date: 5/14/2009 4:52:00 PM

Deborah,..very deep and intriguing write. I like the flow ,..it reminds me of eye surgury,lol.ty james

Sandra Hudson

Date: 5/14/2009 3:47:00 PM

Is this about the space shuttle Atlantis?-AA

Carrie Richards

Date: 5/14/2009 1:01:00 PM

Stirring and mysterious..hmmmm.....to find the meaning behind the return...from time travel or perhaps returning from the near death experience, or...hmmm you like to keep us guessing....but that's good....keeps our imagination fresh!

Owen Hannon

Date: 5/14/2009 12:06:00 PM

is it about time travel by any chance

Trudy Diane Rider

Date: 5/14/2009 12:00:00 PM

Sounds like reincarnation at it's best! I throughly enjoyed this poem Deborah! ~Trudy~

Veronica Joseph

Date: 5/14/2009 11:33:00 AM

sounds like a dream after reading science fiction. Lots of complicated adjectives.

Colin Mitchell Williams

Date: 5/14/2009 9:53:00 AM

This is a very striking poem Deborah... and thank you so much for the placement in your competition.... I am honoured

James Faulkner

Date: 5/14/2009 9:08:00 AM

wow. really love the every line in this poem. very well written.-love and peace:james

Lena Townsend

Date: 5/14/2009 9:02:00 AM

"Too see or not to see" a perfect peice for self reflection. Gets the reader caught up in the mystery of it all. Are there entities or is it merely a creation of the ego roaming free in other worlds? Maybe it's the psychic mind speaking out and blinding me to all I once knew? Maybe there is so much that I am not seeing that I need to see!!! Ahh, yes flashes/strobes of what is, has been, and what will come to pass. Great writing. Intriguing and mysterious. Smiles from Lolita

Sharon Winter

Date: 5/14/2009 8:57:00 AM

Did you have an 'experience'? Wondering fascinated here. You strike me as one so in touch who would/could. But the title, is a bit frightening. Love, Shar

Anthony Nutter

Date: 5/14/2009 8:43:00 AM

The poem attracts me because it reads like a riddle. Still struggling to decipher the meaning but I find it very interesting.