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The Undestined

They don't frolic in a flurry of snow, or muck about in fantasies, daydreaming. Neither hand reaches for another, their two souls of desire, brimming. For they are not rivers, but mountains, tall, standing.

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Mahtab Bangalee

Date: 2/6/2019 11:03:00 PM

so beautiful lines- their two souls of desire, brimming. /For they are not rivers, /but mountains, tall, standing.// like it

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 1/22/2019 6:49:00 PM

Sue, this is how I started learning about poetry. Up at the top - see where it says TYPES of POEMS? Click on it. There are different types listed under each letter of the alphabet, and it tells you how to write each type. I still use it and I have been doing this for almost a year. Types I found fun and easy at first were: tanka, diminished hexaverse, rhyme, haiku, kimo. Try it. You can soupmail me if you get stuck. Just click on the little letter at the top and send me a text.

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 1/22/2019 5:23:00 AM

Sue, welcome to Poetry Soup. You have found us at last, and I am glad! A wonderful first poem posted. I dare guess there are hundreds of others as this surely is not your first one. It is way too polished to be.

Sue San
Date: 1/22/2019 5:50:00 AM

Hi Caren, you are too kind. The truth is, I have the desire to put words on paper but I have no understanding of what makes good poetry or what the rules are. I couldn't even figure out if something like this belonged in a certain category of poems. I finally went in search of a group where I could learn all this from everyone else feedback because I think I could write something significant if I had good people guiding me. So any feedback you can give me on this would be deeply appreciated.