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The Undestined

They don't frolic in a flurry of snow, 
or muck about in fantasies, daydreaming. 
Neither hand reaches for another, 
their two souls of desire, brimming. 
For they are not rivers, 
but mountains, tall, standing.

romantic loverhyme

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Mahtab Bangalee

February 6, 2019 at 11:03 PM

so beautiful lines- their two souls of desire, brimming. /For they are not rivers, /but mountains, tall, standing.// like it

Caren Krutsinger

January 22, 2019 at 6:49 PM

Sue, this is how I started learning about poetry. Up at the top - see where it says TYPES of POEMS? Click on it. There are different types listed under each letter of the alphabet, and it tells you how to write each type. I still use it and I have been doing this for almost a year. Types I found fun and easy at first were: tanka, diminished hexaverse, rhyme, haiku, kimo. Try it. You can soupmail me if you get stuck. Just click on the little letter at the top and send me a text.

Caren Krutsinger

January 22, 2019 at 5:23 AM

Sue, welcome to Poetry Soup. You have found us at last, and I am glad! A wonderful first poem posted. I dare guess there are hundreds of others as this surely is not your first one. It is way too polished to be.

Sue San

January 22, 2019 at 5:50 AM

Hi Caren, you are too kind. The truth is, I have the desire to put words on paper but I have no understanding of what makes good poetry or what the rules are. I couldn't even figure out if something like this belonged in a certain category of poems. I finally went in search of a group where I could learn all this from everyone else feedback because I think I could write something significant if I had good people guiding me. So any feedback you can give me on this would be deeply appreciated.

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