The Undercurrent

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the undercurrent pulls 
drawing me down
to murky dark depths
where sinister abounds

the undercurrent pulls
my body it sweeps
pulling my out
its anger it keeps

the undercurrent draws
a turbulent tempt
it tumbles my heart
with vehement intent

the undercurrent rages
But I'm sturdy and strong
adept in the water
for that's where I belong

the undercurrent subsides
I'm floating serene
my eyes see the sun
I still live, I still dream

Eileen Manassian

Reposting another deleted poem....

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Laura Breidenthal

Date: 8/23/2015 1:10:00 AM

Excellent verse! Really glad you reposted this one... stanza three and four are really awesome and intense...beautifully written once again Eileen! :) Like the photo as well.. Always, Laura

Carol Eastman

Date: 8/19/2015 1:22:00 PM

I loved this, just wish I'd read the other one, too.

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 8/19/2015 11:16:00 AM

No both are good but I felt the emotion of the piece more in this one.

Eileen Manassian
Date: 8/19/2015 11:18:00 AM

Oooopsss....too late! I removed it. Boy have you got influence! Thanks for getting back to me. I'm searching, but I don't think you've posted today. Hugs

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 8/19/2015 9:48:00 AM

The top picture really captures the feel of this one.

Eileen Manassian
Date: 8/19/2015 9:51:00 AM

Hi, Richard. Is the second one too much? I will delete it if you think so. Get back to me! :) Hugs