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The Two of Us

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This is my first ever sestina! I am not sure if it is done right! Any suggestions would be greatly appreciated! Thank you for reading!


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The Two of Us

We met in the park, one glorious summer day
there was an instant attraction we both felt
The touch of our fingers was very electrical.
I was quite taken by the intensity of her beauty,
dark onyx eyes, penetrating so very deep
as her olive skin, black hair possessed my heart.

Amazed how easily she comandeered my heart
The whole of her, was not just her beauty
The depth of her persona, I had easily felt
As only one can feel someone so electrical
Before long her feelings, my feelings grew deep
It helped the two of us to be happy each day.

I couldn't live without her in my life each day
She says, "Lover, your touches has my body electrical
As you send so many sensations coursing down deep
and in all my life, these sexual feelings, I never felt."
"Know, my feelings, reaches far greater then your beauty,
so, life without you, it would crush my very loving heart."

"Lover, how did you ever capture my hardened heart?"
"You were like swimming in blue waters, so very deep
and I decided to take a chance with showing how I felt
about who you are were, never about all of your beauty.
It was me capturing you, your heart to love you each day
because, I want you to keep feeling all inside, so electrical."

"I feel when things falls apart in life, and losing what is electrical
and when the darkness of sad moments, takes over each day.
Then, we need to bring back the love within my heart, your heart
and remember what it was that created what you and I felt.
Which in God's destined for our faith and love to become very deep.
Yes my love, in you it wasn't all about your outward beauty."

I had fallen in love with something you have, a greater inner beauty
and it comes through extraordinarily wonderful each day.
It is the sincerity you possess that makes you so electrical
as I know It was iI, that was able to open your locked and hardened heart.
You have heard my words, which are very heart felt.
They come from the depths of heart which are very are profoundly deep.

No more swimming in waters which may become so very deep
and yet, when , we will age together, we will smile at what we felt
and think back upon the life we shared and it's wonderful beauty!



Copyright © | Year Posted 2016

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