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The Truth Stood Downcast

The truth stood downcast in the lie so self assured, you played the part with flattery, your head held high you ripped apart a trusting heart. A predator without a name the truth stood downcast in the lie you stole her worth, you had no shame inflicted wounds that would not die. Feigning sadness, you would deny your horrible, abusive acts the truth stood downcast in the lie cried false tears, belittled the facts. She clearly saw her grave mistake the devil's gleam was in your eye while no remorse showed on your face the truth stood downcast in the lie. Written on 7/26/2016

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Tom Arnone

Date: 8/26/2016 7:45:00 PM

Caught my attention, Laura. Congrats! :-)

Laura Leiser
Date: 8/26/2016 11:15:00 PM

Thank you, Tom. Glad you liked it.

Sandra Haight

Date: 8/26/2016 3:19:00 PM

So powerful and so sad, but beautifully written. Congratulations on your placement in the contest. Hugs, Sandra

Laura Leiser
Date: 8/26/2016 11:15:00 PM

Thank you, Sandra. I appreciate you taking the time to stop by to comment:)

Jan Allison

Date: 8/26/2016 2:42:00 PM

what a despicable way to treat someone ... but it happens so often Laura - congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx

Laura Leiser
Date: 8/26/2016 11:14:00 PM

Thanks for your comments, Jan. It is sad, isn't it? :(

Lu Loo

Date: 8/26/2016 10:54:00 AM

Laura, congrats on your placement lovely Laura! "devils gleam was in your eye", love that line...:)-luloo

Laura Leiser
Date: 8/26/2016 11:59:00 AM

Thank you, Laura Loo :)

John Lawless

Date: 8/26/2016 9:28:00 AM

Such beautiful poetry to unmask such cruelty and its abhorrent cover-up. thanks for participating in the contest Laura.

Laura Leiser
Date: 8/26/2016 11:58:00 AM

Thank you for placing me in your challenging contest, John! I'm glad you thought the poem worthy.

James Inman

Date: 8/1/2016 7:52:00 AM

A strong and emotional write, Laura. The read is smooth and your refrain line flows naturally in each stanza.

Laura Leiser
Date: 8/12/2016 11:19:00 PM

Thank you for your comments, James. I appreciate them!

Eileen Manassian

Date: 7/28/2016 12:26:00 AM

Very powerful write, my dear. So sad....Thanks for the visit to my work. I've been away. Hope to catch up. I like how you used that term...over and over...the truth stood downcast in the lie. Interesting theme for contest. You brought it to life.

Laura Leiser
Date: 7/30/2016 11:40:00 PM

Thank you, Eileen. Nice to read your great poetry and hear from you again :)

Laura Leiser
Date: 7/30/2016 11:39:00 PM

Thank you, Eileen. Nice to read your great poetry and hear from you again :)

Constance La France

Date: 7/27/2016 6:23:00 PM

Laura , WONDER for the contest, well done, I like where you took the theme ~

Laura Leiser
Date: 7/27/2016 10:47:00 PM

Thank you, Constance! Glad you like this:)

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 7/27/2016 5:45:00 PM

Excellent Laura and a poem I can identify with. Apathy of the arrogant! 7 ; )

Laura Leiser
Date: 7/27/2016 6:00:00 PM

Thank you for commenting, Connie. I hope you don't identify too much...as it is a sad way to treat anyone!

Pace Ink-U-Script

Date: 7/27/2016 11:54:00 AM

Awesome Quatern!!!! Very smooth

Laura Leiser
Date: 7/27/2016 6:00:00 PM

Thank you, Charlie:)

Laura Leiser
Date: 7/27/2016 5:56:00 PM

Thank you, Pace! Sorry the earlier comment jumped to you :O

Laura Leiser
Date: 7/27/2016 5:55:00 PM

Thank you, Charlie:)

Charlie Smith

Date: 7/27/2016 11:49:00 AM

Well done Laura, best wishes in the contest...

Laura Leiser
Date: 7/27/2016 6:00:00 PM

Thank you, Victor:)

Laura Leiser
Date: 7/27/2016 4:40:00 PM

Thank you, Charlie:)

Anthony Mark

Date: 7/27/2016 3:23:00 AM

Hi Laura , for a fictional write of abuse, you certainly immersed and wrote from the inside, a kind of " look I'm here" write, that carries a lot more credibility than I'm used to seeing from you....a very good write indeed, that catapults you up the poetic pyramid ...well done...ian

Laura Leiser
Date: 7/27/2016 11:20:00 AM

Thanks for the high compliment, Ian (albeit backhanded!) I know you like the darker writes...

John Watt

Date: 7/26/2016 5:18:00 PM

Laura - powerful poem! I appreciate the personification of truth standing downcast. Nice movement of the main line; moving one line down in each stanza. Great cadence in your meter. Heartbreaking description of an abusive relationship... must have been hard to write.

Laura Leiser
Date: 7/26/2016 6:57:00 PM

Thanks, John~ Your words of encouragement are greatly appreciated! It took a while to figure out how I wanted it to go, but then the words starting coming...