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The Trained Refuge

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The long guns trained upon my fragile refuge,
yet still to find forgiveness in contrite cadence' known.
Will you discover the dream has died-
in defiance of a love so giving...
to find the day's child-like grasp,
of world and wonder worth living.

Copyright © Quoth Theraven | Year Posted 2019

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Kai Michael Neumann Date: 12/8/2019 5:38:00 AM Love is stronger than guns ... Login to Reply Quoth Theraven Date: 12/25/2019 9:14:00 PM Kai, Thank you for that comment. And I hope your Christmas was full of...guns. Kidding, full of L--O-V-E. Nat King Cole said it so well: https://youtu.be/f_HmF84G7ZY

Paul Callus Date: 11/17/2019 12:28:00 PM Those guns have no real effect on one who lives in hope and love, Richard! Your striking poem is a delight to read. Regards // paul Login to Reply Quoth Theraven Date: 12/25/2019 9:10:00 PM Paul, Thanks for the comment. Merry Christmas wishes...going back to the '70's just in the Nick of time. -Richard

Quoth Theraven Date: 10/19/2019 2:05:00 PM Andrea, Thanks for the comment. I did think.., but no. Decided best to leave the beautiful melody & voices just as they are. -Richard Login to Reply

Andrea Dietrich Date: 10/19/2019 1:16:00 PM I listened to the nice music and was hoping to hear your voice reading the poem?? Anyway, the poem is very nice. Your poem shows much consideration and l for your fellow man. Login to Reply Quoth Theraven Date: 10/19/2019 2:06:00 PM Andrea, Thanks for the comment. I did think.., but no. Decided best to leave the beautiful melody & voices just as they are. -Richard

Kurt Ravidas Date: 10/17/2019 8:08:00 AM We're all refugees before the lotus feet of God. Login to Reply Kurt Ravidas Date: 10/18/2019 7:01:00 PM Of course we do. We have no choice) Quoth Theraven Date: 10/17/2019 10:06:00 AM Kurt, Thank you for this wonderful comment. I hope we find a path to home. -Richard

Hello There Date: 10/16/2019 1:10:00 AM Hard when love is defied to find the wonders of living again...but time, they say...heals. Intriguing piece, Richard ~ Login to Reply Quoth Theraven Date: 10/17/2019 10:04:00 AM Hello, Thank you for your healing comment. This message is a thin-veiled attempt at apologies for failing to say 'I love you', 'I'm proud of you'. Trespasses and transgressions never meant. -Richard

Vegter Papyrus Date: 10/13/2019 2:12:00 PM The words go perfectly with the music. Every line is valuable; making this grand! Login to Reply Quoth Theraven Date: 10/13/2019 4:59:00 PM Vegter, Thank you for mentioning this. It gets its hooks in you, Soleado (Sunny). Perhaps angels landed on Earth to record it back in 1974. -Richard

Silent One Date: 10/13/2019 1:32:00 PM we live in a cruel world where some suffer in silence, whilst other increase the suffering, and some remain clueless.. it is always important to forgive and move on.. but can be difficult. Login to Reply Quoth Theraven Date: 10/13/2019 6:54:00 PM Silent One, Thanks for the comment, and wisdom. It is difficult...trying not to step on toes when born with two left feet. On another note, I wanted to say how much I enjoyed the ride of your recent collaboration with Sandra Adams, 'Graveyard of poets'. So inspired by both. -Richard

Panagiota Romios Date: 10/12/2019 11:49:00 AM Wow....deep! PR Login to Reply Quoth Theraven Date: 10/17/2019 11:11:00 PM Panagiota, Thanks for commenting. You are truly one deserving of a better day. -Richard

Elaine Perrin Date: 10/12/2019 10:43:00 AM Powerful piece :-) x Login to Reply Quoth Theraven Date: 10/17/2019 11:10:00 PM Elaine, Thanks for the comment. So glad you came along with your poetry. -Richard

Sandra Adams Date: 10/12/2019 10:20:00 AM love the way you started this one, powerful and thought provoking poem! hugs Login to Reply

Janice Canerdy Date: 10/12/2019 7:36:00 AM Moving poem about the dangers and love in the world, Richard. Janice Login to Reply Quoth Theraven Date: 10/12/2019 10:02:00 PM Janice, The poem is about finding hope where there appears none. And seeking forgiveness for all those that I've wronged. I am sorry for the deeds and words that ever hurt. -Richard

Heidi Sands Date: 10/12/2019 6:08:00 AM A thought provoking poem. and I like the line....to find in day's child-like grasp. Well done :) Login to Reply Quoth Theraven Date: 10/12/2019 1:51:00 PM Heidi, Thanks for the comments. Thanks for all of them throughout the days. I just read your Rhyme "Everything Good is Worth Restoring". Such a gifted poet's voice, a force to be reckoned and relished. And I do. -Richard