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The Thrill Is Gone

For years I’d begged my parents for a puppy
Sam was a surprise gift for my ninth birthday 
With his huge dark brown eyes and long waggy tail 
I was just smitten

When I returned home from school, he’d fetch his lead 
then wait patiently by the door to go out
I’d promised my parents I’d take him for walks
to the local park

That year we had such a glorious summer 
We’d play outside all day in the bright sunshine 
Autumn came, with drizzle and torrential rain
I hated those walks!

The reality of owning Sam hit home
In rainy weather we still had to go out
But I’d made a lifelong commitment to Sam
my four legged friend

Pick-A-Title, Vol 19 - 4 Sapphic Stanzas - Poetry Contest

Sponsored By Edward Ibeh

5. The Thrill Is Gone

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06/12/20

Copyright © Jan Allison | Year Posted 2020

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Aditi Mishra Date: 7/27/2020 11:45:00 AM Oh this is such a heartwarming tale Jan! Absolutely love Sam :) Congratulations on your win! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 7/27/2020 2:01:00 PM Thanks Aditi:-) hugs Jan xx

Vijay Pandit Date: 7/23/2020 4:35:00 AM Enjoyed the story, Jan--the final stanza most of us can relate to as well. A wonderful podium win..BIG congrats! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 7/23/2020 2:49:00 PM Thanks Vijay:-) hugs Jan xx

Hilo Poet Date: 7/22/2020 7:11:00 PM A touching rendering written from the heart, Jan, quaint indeed my friend and my compliments on your honorable placement -- Aloha~@William Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 7/23/2020 2:49:00 PM thanks William:-) hugs Jan xx

James Inman Date: 7/22/2020 6:10:00 PM A sweet story and wonderful life lesson, Jan. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 7/23/2020 2:48:00 PM thanks James:-) hugs Jan xx

Edward Ibeh Date: 7/22/2020 10:52:00 AM This is a terrific, cute poem, Jan:-) I really enjoyed it. Heartiest congratulations on your win! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 7/22/2020 11:36:00 AM many thanks Edward:-) hugs Jan xx

Michelle Faulkner Date: 6/17/2020 9:49:00 PM I actually had a dog named Sammy (been gone a few years now) but he was my fluffy sweetheart, this brought back happy memories, so thank you- Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 7/14/2020 2:15:00 PM aww bet you miss him Michelle:-( hugs jan xx

Lindsay Laurie Date: 6/15/2020 6:14:00 PM Hello Jan … the context of your verse describes the new age dog. Once the owners made the decision; nowadays the owner does what the dog tells them to do. This is a great style Jan - thank you - Lindsay Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 6/15/2020 6:39:00 PM thanks Lindsay I struggled with this form not sure I will write it again in the future:-) hugs jan xx

Funom Makama Date: 6/15/2020 3:20:00 PM Remarkable lines, true words, amazing piece from a very deep and wise mind. I love every bit of this. Great work Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 6/15/2020 4:36:00 PM thanks Funom:-) hugs Jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong Date: 6/13/2020 6:48:00 PM Your entry is a good one Jan! I will have to check out this contest. So many contests to consider. Our rain here is warm so I never mind getting wet! I hope this rates high for you Jan. Enjoy your weekend. One day is just like the rest here. : ) xxoo Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 6/13/2020 7:24:00 PM I found it a real challenge, thanks for dropping by Connie:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich Date: 6/13/2020 6:36:00 PM ahh, this is the one you entered. The Thrill is Gone with that cute Sam dog poem. Is it true you had such a dog, Jan? I've yet to do Sapphic STanza. It's very difficult. Hurrah for you doing one here! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 6/13/2020 7:11:00 PM It's pure fiction and I found it such a challenge - will be my fist and last lol:-) hugs Jan xx