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The Tease

I saw her walking down the darkened gallery,
Beneath unlit Venetian chandeliers,
I glimpsed her acquiescent smile
That never left her lips,
A smile that animated pleasure
And instilled a prick of wonder,
And an expanse of love.
 
With some embarrassing misdemeanor,
I tiptoed forth and fell in step with her,
I, bold and daring;
She, a feigned timidity in her mien.
 
Her flared skirt rustled softly against my leg,
And in the silence I felt 
Her hand brushing against mine,
Her long fingers curled delicately
And intertwined with mine.
A moment of time, split second of ecstasy,
Our eyes met in a finite profound gaze,
And her lips quivered.

And then.....

All was as before.
Smoothly we drew apart,
Steps never faltering,
As she hurried away
Into a maze of corridors,
To meet her love.
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Empress Avatar
November 29, 2023 at 6:40 PM
Saw this on homepage and thought of commenting here on your poem. I really love the emotions flowing in such a delicate manner in this especially the opening lines are truly captivating. Pleasure reading this
Proxenos Avatar
May 22, 2021 at 8:25 AM
Unbelievable write dear Victor,sad she rushed away so quickly, I was hoping thing worked out as you had hoped. You write amazing romantic stories. Hugs and blessings, Jennifer.
Rodrigues Avatar
May 20, 2021 at 11:40 AM
Suspense! Great writing!
Edmonds  Avatar
May 20, 2021 at 11:37 AM
Brief but sweet, some girls are teasers and deceivers. A lovely story with a surprising twist, once again an awesome write Victor… Belle
Roper Avatar
May 19, 2021 at 10:28 PM
Wow! Just a moment meeting. You never end to surprise me with your artistry of your very thoughts and feelings, Victor!
Mcintosh Avatar
May 19, 2021 at 3:05 PM
Ah... a breath of wonder, whispers of light and laughter, imagination so amazing. God bless you Victor. Love, Gina
Rose  Avatar
May 19, 2021 at 3:01 PM
Ah, a missed love, one that left a floral thought in your heart. Well written dear poet. How easily you let the pen flow when it comes to love and romance, Its to be admired. :)
Y. Avatar
May 19, 2021 at 2:34 PM
WoW! Victor, You described such an encounter so well. It wasn’t the happy ending that I was rooting for, but it was so well written. Well done. Have a wonderful day, my friend:-) Alexis
Jayasankar Avatar
May 19, 2021 at 11:23 AM
Great write Victor...'A tease'.. A moment of expectation and disappointment... well imagined.. God bless.. ~ Ani
Buehler Avatar
May 19, 2021 at 11:05 AM
Quite a vivid portrayal of an ecstatic, but regrettably fleeting encounter. Well imagined, Victor. Evelyn
Devonshire Avatar
May 19, 2021 at 8:34 AM
Oh, I didn't expect the twist at the end, Victor. It does seem like she purposely lured you, only to walk away. Excellent writing! Hugs, Carolyn
Poet Avatar
May 19, 2021 at 6:38 AM
You never stop to stun with your charming creative mind VICTOR, What a superb write my friend! blessings and best wishes
Seeker Avatar
May 19, 2021 at 6:28 AM
A tease, indeed! May the romantic spirit in you keep bubbling!
Daniel Avatar
May 19, 2021 at 5:04 AM
Ah! That was a tease to remember, Victor:)
Pandit Avatar
May 19, 2021 at 5:03 AM
A delightful tease it was. A moment so beautifully captured, Victor. I enjoyed the read.
Riabi Dziri Avatar
May 19, 2021 at 4:47 AM
You never cease to amaze with your captivating imagination and your artistic adeptness to translate your very thoughts and feelings! What a wonderful twist! I so much enjoyed the whole atmosphere of your story, Victor! Warmest wishes and best regards.
Buhagiar Avatar
May 19, 2021 at 5:55 AM
Thank you it has been awhile since I read a poem of yours. They are always sublime.
Kendrick Avatar
May 19, 2021 at 3:28 AM
Ahhh!! Romantic but I would not want to be her love because she apparently was not true. Thanks for dropping by my page. Sara
Andresen Avatar
May 19, 2021 at 1:28 AM
- She's flirting with you ... a lovely poem, Victor :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Cunningham Avatar
May 19, 2021 at 1:00 AM
A brief encounter but sadly it wasn't to be. Tom
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