The Tear I Abhor

Tension crawls into the pores of crashing contemplation
Why has it become so hard to breathe?
If only it was known what this dejected heart is saying
As she sobs poetic lines of wordless woe
She is cradled in the tempo tempest of this reflection
Pulsing in the unfeeling land beyond her bodily home
The blood pumping sweet iron grief spurts
The soles of the feet throb at the impact
As the grass cools only to recall the coldness of the present

The impact…
Of a tear falling to the floor
The droplet so gentle… in clear-watered, grounded rapture
The energy of the sorrow befallen is perilous
One with many roads leading to frail fantasy
Aggravated tear…so atrocious, envious
There is something more whirling in this déjà vu cycle

Being crushed many times
By lackadaisical, ever-traveling minds
It is too easy to be tossed to and fro
Between conscious leisure and provocative pressure
 Sub-dominated by sumptuous conviction
That word—love—a furtive dagger
Driving a gaping hole of shame and unknowing
Straight into her
Wracking around in this meddle
Of emotion and reason—shooting up falsehood full throttle
Drifting there again
In a solitude almost consoled by the earthy coldness
Of his fowl glare…
Every unsaid word frazzling to the mind
Tearing me and lifting me high
One must wonder if you watch as the fragments fly

As they float for only a few seconds
Of your precious time 
And fall back down below
At your very feet
Where the grass is warm, and hopes are high

Please don’t leave them on the floor with the tear
The tear that never quite gets absorbed
The tear that chillingly consoles that bleeding heart
Destroying me
As she thrashes in the maze of bones and matter
Each hollow pathway of the marrow leading to a dead end
Or an  ever-winding way downwards

They say each body of water leads straight to the sea
Where will the tear I abhor…lead me?

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014



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Date: 2/13/2015 2:39:00 AM
Each bloodlet of love leads to the heart...the tear of your truth will lead to the bravery of your beauty Laura..."That word, love, a furtive dagger...as she sobs wordless lines of poetic woe..."nly your passion for meaning could create a phenomenal universe from a single tear of pain Laura. I love the way you experience things, the way you make life sweat...its awesome, and this composition of a woman's maelstrom is a masterpiece Laura...J.A.B.
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Date: 2/13/2015 9:02:00 PM
Thanks Justin... I was in a very dark place when writing this one... it means a lot that you commented on this older write... thanks very much for your kind words and sweet support..~Laura
Date: 1/21/2014 6:07:00 PM
Such fanciful descriptiveness! If Rod Serling were alive today, it might inspire him to write an episode for either "The Twilight Zone" or "Night Gallery".
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Date: 1/20/2014 5:15:00 PM
The stuff of legend Laura ....absolutely loved this one.... a poem on the rape of ones soul, perhaps ...the allowance of a twisted Godless love ...you write with great passion well done you...xXx
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Date: 1/20/2014 4:04:00 PM
OH MY LAURA..........You swept me along with this poem, but those last two lines...what an ending! Superb! I loved these lines...."As she sobs poetic lines of wordless woe"....and lackadaisical! YES! Laura...this is so deep. Unsaid words do "frazzle the mind". I don't presume to know the pain from where this came, but so good to be able to write and write....to honor that tear that you abhor, for it shows you are human, you have a heart and a soul. HUGS
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Date: 1/16/2014 5:41:00 PM
This poem is actually expressed quite beautifully, even with it's deep sadness and despair. The reader can feel the painful emotion and the sense of hopelessness bleeding through in every line. A truly amazing and phenomenal write, Laura!
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Date: 1/15/2014 4:46:00 PM
Wow! Absolutely brilliant. The crashing tears tear at my heart. I feel your pain throughout this verse. A great on indeed. Bravo! ~Kilmwer
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