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The pale faced young damsel By evening turned into a blushing bride Her cheeks made red with rouge And her lips glossed in cherry red But the makeup artist, before Seeing the magic of his deft touch By some sudden mental derailment In a bid at self immolation, Set fire to himself Badly burned by the inferno He plunged into the waters below One more attempt at suicide? Or a frantic attempt to save himself, From an act, he impulsively rushed into? Yet another question remains ‘Can flames turn him to ashes?’ Or water, drown his resilience? July. 15.2022 A Brian Strand Premiere Poetry Contest

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Date: 7/21/2022 2:36:00 PM
Engaging poetry, Valsa, and great ending questions. Will have to think about the answers. A poet friend in Texas, Bill
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Date: 7/21/2022 8:08:00 AM
Well written. Ann
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Date: 7/16/2022 1:48:00 PM
To me this as a most striking metaphor, Valsa. I love the ending! ~ Regards // paul
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Date: 7/15/2022 6:34:00 PM
Aye, some artists do take, "Lend me your ear" lliteraetly. Enjoyed, Valsa!
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Date: 7/15/2022 11:36:00 AM
Lovely penning indeed Valsa, really insight thought. Blessings,Gordon
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Date: 7/15/2022 7:10:00 AM
Valsa, this is a really fascinating poem that delves deep into several thought-provoking topics and has a philosophical undercurrent. ‘Can flames turn him to ashes?’ Or water, drown his resilience? Best for a win.
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Date: 7/15/2022 5:54:00 AM
When the mind goes, anything is possible. Artists are like that I suppose.
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Date: 7/15/2022 3:24:00 AM
Very interesting poem, Valsa! Best wishes
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Date: 7/15/2022 1:00:00 AM
He must have been mad. A person who can be such an artist would never commit suicide, or would he?
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