The Sun Rose Red

As Dawn cracks over the horizon
The small crescent moon takes a bow
Greeting her was a delight 
For she paints silver in his hair

The moon was hardly visible
Painted the same shade of blue
That the sky chose as a cloak 
On this morning of early dew

The cloak of blue had a trail of mist
That shrouded the hills and vales
A misty blue to silver gray 
That was light and very airy still

The birds enjoy the cloak
That fanned the air with damp
Cooling mist of the night
But soon the sun put on another

Cloak as she became much brighter
With her dress of brilliant red
That she wore to grace our summer's day
A cloak as colored as  poinsettias' tips

On a gray December day
This means that the sun
Will bring heat with her as hot as
A fiery oak wood coal

And the cool of the morn 
Will go as the summer's sun
Has bid us a warm hello
The moon with his silver hair

Disappearing into night
To another land so swiftly
Did he go to bring it a high tide
While ours will go very low

The sun rose cloaked in red
Bringing her heated stove
She will bake and cook some bread
Heating the south as across the sky goes
Copyright © | Year Posted 2010


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Date: 7/13/2010 4:07:00 AM
wow what a lovely picture you have woven thru this amazing verse. Thanks for your ever encouraging comments.
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Date: 7/11/2010 10:15:00 PM
beautiful it must have been(: i imagine the blue moon covered by dark clouds, i think its so pretty. ~Always&Forever Lynette
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Date: 7/10/2010 12:30:00 PM
Another great poem from a talented lady!!! always Michael
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Date: 7/10/2010 9:44:00 AM
Yes, that was an innovative way to do it, Sara, use sky as the gowned queen to her old man, moon!!
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Date: 7/10/2010 6:14:00 AM
Such a delightful read on this fine Saturday Sara, thank you for your lovely comments >> James
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Date: 7/9/2010 6:24:00 PM
enjoying your gifted pen. when others try it they pale in comparison. but your nature comes to life. john h loving iii
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Date: 7/9/2010 6:17:00 PM
Hi Sara! I liked your take on the moon as a guy-- I think it's pretty unique, it's been a while since I've seen it depicted as one-I distinctly remember a McDonald's ad before though ;) loved the imagery you put in here--btw not sure but I think in L4S2, you doubled up on your phrase "of early"? sorry if I'm wrong & it's meant to be that way... best of luck to you if this is for a contest :) --nikko :) DSUN?? my captcha says! I swear someone's messing with me today!!
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Date: 7/9/2010 4:33:00 PM
So lovely and vivid ..very visual .. vibrant scenes u paint with your pen Sara.. hope u are feeling OK today.. be leaving in an hour for home.. see u on Saturday.. I have a new Haiku contest posted..hope u will enter.. with luv..
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Date: 7/9/2010 2:46:00 PM
Liked to read your free verse tonight, Sara! To answer your question about Antoine de Saint-Exupéry, he was either shot down by a German fighter during WWII or had engine trouble with his plane. He crashed into the Mediterranean Sea. Thanks for commenting "Night Fligt" and have a nice Sunday!...Gert
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Date: 7/9/2010 1:26:00 PM
Hey, this could be entered in two contests it looks like! THe personification of moon or the free verse contest. Is it entered in one of them? I was interested in how the moon was a sliver of one, denoted as "he" and the sky and dawn were female! This was very interesting. LUv, Andrea
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Date: 7/9/2010 9:06:00 AM
enjoyed
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Date: 7/9/2010 6:28:00 AM
Hi Sara, I am going to try to start commenting again. I have just been too weepy these past three months…commenting became difficult. I do enjoy reading your wonderful poetry, though. This one is particularly nice with excellent imagery. I appreciate your strengths. Thanks for understanding. God be with you and keep up the excellent writing. Lovingly, Dane Ann
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Date: 7/9/2010 5:46:00 AM
Sara, this is a very lovely free verse read, the imagery holds the minds-eye captivated from beginning to end. Thank you for sharing the read. God's Love and Many Blessings, Always, Adell
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