The Summer Fling

A delight for female eyes was his gorgeous face and strong physique; His dark eyes lured them in, but his kisses left them spellbound. The beauty of his skin could but briefly hide his fickle heart. One summer he met at last the woman who could claim his heart - A lovely Aphrodite to match this young Adonis. With her wiles, she beguiled him, and his flighty heart then grew devout. From June to July, boundless seemed their rapture; how they loved . . . in brilliant fields of daffodils; on amber sand beneath the moon! By August, he was on one knee with a diamond ring in hand. Red anemones bloom in the garden where he saw her last. The Aphrodite he hoped to wed was someone else instead - Brawn and beauty are not all; a wise Athena finished their fling. For Deb's Sijo Strings Contest
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Roper Avatar
January 29, 2015 at 3:38 PM
Andrea, love the imagery on this write, a 7. Blessings dear friend Eve
Yvonne Avatar
October 21, 2014 at 8:24 PM
This is excellent, Andrea. Each sijo true to the form.
Babcock Avatar
September 10, 2014 at 9:22 PM
Summer romance that blooms and then falls apart in this poem. Nice one. love phyl
George   Avatar
July 4, 2014 at 6:50 AM
Andrea, This is a sensational story told in sijo form with a wise life lesson conveyed. Top notch in my book. bfn Lainie
A   Avatar
July 3, 2014 at 11:28 AM
Thanks for the soup mail... No worries.... Awesome win... Linda
Mehta Avatar
July 3, 2014 at 6:07 AM
A gripping romantic tale of the summer love, Andrea, congrats
Chutani Avatar
July 3, 2014 at 2:04 AM
Very romantic summer fling sijo strings, Andrea. Congrats on the win. Mohan
May Avatar
July 2, 2014 at 7:18 PM
Lovely write Andrea ...congrats on your win
Nance Avatar
July 2, 2014 at 6:26 PM
Spectacular! much different from the others on the list, this is definatly worthy of a winner, you are a goddess with a poetic paintbrush :)
Guillermo - Fraser Avatar
July 2, 2014 at 6:26 PM
your fourth sijo so great.. :D! COngratulations Anrea.. :D
Stephens Avatar
July 2, 2014 at 5:34 PM
Hi Andrea, Congrats. Enjoyable imagery and expertly handled sijo. All the best Theresa xx
Sietesantos Avatar
July 2, 2014 at 3:53 PM
Hi Andrea, congratulations on a well-deserved great win! The imagery is magnificent! Beautiful write! Kindest regards.
Lawless Avatar
July 2, 2014 at 2:52 PM
Another summer break-up poem. But as such captures the thrill of summer love in ancient Greece. Well done you tied the summer strings together nicely.
Smith Avatar
July 2, 2014 at 1:58 PM
Love it Andrea! The sting of summer love! Congrats on a great win. Hugs.. Arlene
A. Sharma Avatar
July 2, 2014 at 1:47 PM
Awesome Andrea ! Every string is so beautiful n complementing ,, beauty comes alive ,, congrats on win !
Callus Avatar
July 2, 2014 at 1:41 PM
Very creative write Andrea. Brawn vis brains. Lovely imagery, especially in 3rd sijo. Congrats on a fine win. // paul
Macfarlane Avatar
June 18, 2014 at 8:45 PM
I love this Andrea, his fickle heart had a well needed lesson. Terrific write!
Marcum Wong Avatar
June 18, 2014 at 3:02 PM
Your poem mesmerizes with brilliant imagery "in brilliant fields of daffodils; on amber sand beneath the moon!" and then ends with the reward a fickle heart deserves. Brilliant Sijo Andrea!
Horne Avatar
June 15, 2014 at 7:31 AM
LOL, witty write indeed
A   Avatar
June 14, 2014 at 10:46 PM
Andrea, this is some sweet, heavy artillery summer fling. I can't imagine anyone saying NO, to that diamond ring. Excellent imagery. XOX...Linda
Onclaud Avatar
June 13, 2014 at 2:49 PM
you stepped right up the ladder with this mythical wonder, andie... haven't done one yet... so busy with house renovation.. will soupy you soon!.. lovely sijo!.. huggs and congrats on your win in my contest... will send my cheers to all when time allows..
Bordner Avatar
June 13, 2014 at 12:23 PM
This poem has such an awesome ancient tone and lesson to it Andrea. Makes me grateful that I have wisdom to match my braun, realizing the difference between a Goddess and a Harpy. I wonder who gained most, the one who experienced true love, or the one who stepped with lies.Funny how predators often overestimate their strengths and underestimate the intuition of their prospective prey. This is a bona fide masterpiece Andrea, a FAV!
Mister Roboto Avatar
June 13, 2014 at 9:31 AM
Good for Athena! ~ This reminds me of one I read by you a long time ago~! BTW....I'm BaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaCK!~ locked and loaded with 10,000 or so new poems. glad to see you are still at it!
Merrill Avatar
June 13, 2014 at 12:51 AM
Hi Andrea! Just stopped by to say hello, and to catch up on your writes. This one is great. Of course, after reading the first few lines I assumed it was about me lol Smiles and hugs, my friend...Mel
Peterson Avatar
June 13, 2014 at 12:31 AM
This is an example of extraordinary writing skill. Mesmerizing! The world would have to wait a long time for me or most other mortals to attempt such.
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