Daniel Turner Poet Rhyme

The Sum of a Life

This life we're living
Is so unforgiving
Reminding us every day
Of games that we played
Choices we made
Dreams that faded away
Paths that were crossed
Loved ones we've lost
Still promising a brighter tomorrow
When that promise is broken
Our wounds rip back open
Leaving hope to drown in deep sorrow

From our very first breath
We're stalked by death
We live our lives in fear
Knowing well it won't last
So we live loose and fast
Look up and the days have become years
We add peace, subtract strife 
Find the sum of a life
Discover we've love left for giving
Love that goes wasted 
On the bitterness tasted
In a life so unforgiving





  by Daniel Turner

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Gary Bateman June 12, 2018 at 5:17 PM Hello Danny, A very powerful rhyme reflection here on "The Sum of a Life." Death is a topic I have written my fair share of poetry on. Death and our eventual walk into the Great Beyond and the Metaphysical Unknown are part and parcel of the finite reality of each of us as mortal beings in this world. When it comes my time, I just hope I can take a couple shots (or many shots) of fine whiskey before departing this moral coil. Your last six verses say it all. Superb!! A FAVE!! Best Always, Gary

Gershon Wolf June 12, 2018 at 12:25 PM Whoa! A very rife reflection, indeed--rife with the realization of life's disappointment in the belated knowledge that all we had was time... Sage philosophizing, Daniel! ~ Gershon

John Hamilton June 10, 2018 at 3:24 PM Truer words never spoken Danny, I get the sense that you are doing well, glad to see it, and I must say the quality of this rhyme is very good, glad to see you getting lot's of comments on this one. Take care dear poet!

Probir Gupta June 4, 2018 at 10:59 PM Philosophical reflection on life ... Nicely penned ... I may not agree but did read with genuine glee ...

Lindsay Laurie June 3, 2018 at 7:15 PM Hello Daniel … you summed up the story of life in two verses extremely well. And naturally really well written and rhymed - thank you Daniel;Lindsay

Eileen Manassian May 29, 2018 at 1:49 AM Wow...my sentiments exactly. I've always been overwhelmed by thoughts of death and dying. I think it has hampered my ability to live life to the fullest. Thanks for this lovely reminder, so aptly written. Hugs Daniel Turner May 29, 2018 at 8:57 AM Thank you, Eileen. It seems you and I have more in common than a love of poetry:) Death is never too far away. I have come very close more than a few times.

Janice Canerdy May 28, 2018 at 7:25 AM This fine, realistic poem made me cry-- my newest favorite, Daniel! Janice Daniel Turner May 28, 2018 at 11:02 AM I am sorry I made you cry, Janice. You have such a tender heart:) God bless and thank you for your support.

CayCay Godwin May 27, 2018 at 11:00 AM Oh, this came from your core and it is powerfully raw as well as relatable. A Wow therapy write that spilled pieces of you onto the paper. I could go PollyAnna and remind you to live in the moment, look back never and forward not, but these feelings are real, I've had them and I get them. Changing your channel is a necessary eventuality because perspective is all - but that's not what this poem is about. Well done. Poetry hugs ... CayCay Daniel Turner May 27, 2018 at 8:21 PM Hey girl! So nice to see your lovely icon on my page:) Thank you for friendly visits. Hoping you are well:)

Roy Pett May 27, 2018 at 7:47 AM I thoroughly enjoyed reading your thought provoking poem Daniel I can certainly relate, so many dreams and plans then we find it’s to late, well written. :)) Daniel Turner May 27, 2018 at 8:19 PM Thank you, Roy. Just simply isn't enough time. I appreciate your time and your support, my friend.

Susan Gentry May 27, 2018 at 1:08 AM Deep writing about real life... expressed so well, making one think and feel. A fave. Well done. Daniel Turner May 27, 2018 at 8:19 PM Thank you, Susan. It's always my pleasure when you visit:) Has it been hot enough for you?

Nette Onclaud May 25, 2018 at 5:33 PM you seize the day with the glory of your word-pictures, daniel... greeat write!..huggs Daniel Turner May 27, 2018 at 8:17 PM Hello nette:) Thank you, Hoping you are well.

Charlie Smith May 25, 2018 at 2:46 PM Really, really well done Daniel, look up and the days become years, great line, all my best my friend... Daniel Turner May 27, 2018 at 8:17 PM Hello Charlie:) Thank you for dropping by to read and comment. How are you? Is it hot enough for you yet? I think summer bullied spring to leave early, here.

Paul Callus May 24, 2018 at 4:13 PM You summed life up very capably, Danny...so many ups and down, so much left undone, so much wasted time...so much pain, too! Regards // paul Daniel Turner May 27, 2018 at 8:15 PM Thank you, Paul. I appreciate your kindness. It's always a pleasure to look up and see you visiting:) Be well!

Silent One May 23, 2018 at 11:47 AM You are right Daniel, well said.. Hope all is well with you. Daniel Turner May 27, 2018 at 8:14 PM Hello old friend. Thank you and yes I am fine. How about yourself? How are the bunnies doing?

Gregory Richard Barden May 22, 2018 at 9:16 PM Much truth and bitter beauty here, and just a marvelous write ... I so relate to these superbly-crafted words, my friend. Blessings! Daniel Turner May 27, 2018 at 8:12 PM Thank you Greg. I always appreciate your time and support:)

Pashang Salehi May 22, 2018 at 12:53 PM It seems that you are a little down DT. Have a glass of wine on me. Daniel Turner May 27, 2018 at 8:11 PM Thank you Pashang,old friend. You know I don't drink alcohol but I appreciate the thought:) No, I'm not down suprisingly:)

Winged Warrior May 21, 2018 at 6:37 AM Wisely said in a nutshell, Daniel...that sums it all up...love and light...^WW^ Daniel Turner May 22, 2018 at 8:19 AM Thank you, Wingman. Hoping you are well my friend. It's always a pleasure:)

Ralph Sergi May 20, 2018 at 9:58 AM This poem was beautiful, Daniel and my age , I can relate to it, I'm going to copy this for prosperity! Daniel Turner May 22, 2018 at 8:18 AM Thank you, Ralph. The highest compliment of all:) So nice to see you again.

Eve Roper May 18, 2018 at 10:50 AM A nice timeline of life, Daniel.. I guess we need our downs to appreciate the ups in our time travel into the future … Thank you for reading " The Old Elf Poet Awaits At the River's Edge ".. hugs Eve ~`* Daniel Turner May 22, 2018 at 8:18 AM Thank you, Eve. Hoping you are well:)

Andrea Dietrich May 17, 2018 at 4:49 PM I loved the analogy to math, what we add and subtract. this is a very clever and well thought out poem, Danny. Keep up the good work! Daniel Turner May 22, 2018 at 8:17 AM Thank you, Andrea. I appreciate your kindness:)

Chris Hagy May 17, 2018 at 3:20 PM Deep and well written Daniel...I like the flow of the rhyme :) Life may be unforgiving...but HE is not...depending on what you believe of course :) Daniel Turner May 22, 2018 at 8:16 AM Thank you, Chris. I appreciate your kindness and your support.

Dean Wood May 17, 2018 at 1:04 PM Yes sir, that about sums it up! I love those last three lines! Daniel Turner May 22, 2018 at 8:15 AM Thank you, Dean. Wonderful to see you again.

Heidi Sands May 17, 2018 at 6:51 AM I hope you don't mind DT. This poem of yours inspired my muse. I am entering a poem and making reference to being inspired by this one of yours :) Daniel Turner May 17, 2018 at 9:40 AM You know I don't mind. I am honored. Love:)

Heidi Sands May 17, 2018 at 6:18 AM This poem is filled with truth. Life brings us through so much and I know that I have seen some of the worst and some of the best. Well written DT :) Daniel Turner May 17, 2018 at 9:40 AM Thank you, Heidi. I am glad you liked it.It's always a pleasure to have you visit:)

Elaine George May 17, 2018 at 2:44 AM Yes! Life is a journey of roses and thorns. You conveyed in so well, Daniel. Elaine Daniel Turner May 17, 2018 at 9:38 AM Thank you, Elaine for taking the time to read and comment. I appreciate your support.

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