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The Sum of a Life

This life we're living
Is so unforgiving
Reminding us every day
Of games that we played
Choices we made
Dreams that faded away
Paths that were crossed
Loved ones we've lost
Still promising a brighter tomorrow
When that promise is broken
Our wounds rip back open
Leaving hope to drown in deep sorrow

From our very first breath
We're stalked by death
We live our lives in fear
Knowing well it won't last
So we live loose and fast
Look up and the days have become years
We add peace, subtract strife 
Find the sum of a life
Discover we've love left for giving
Love that goes wasted 
On the bitterness tasted
In a life so unforgiving





  by Daniel Turner




Copyright © | Year Posted 2018




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Date: 6/27/2018 3:47:00 PM
A very nice summing up, Daniel. I, personally, have not found life to be so "unforgiving" as "unconcerned". But it has been an interesting ride.
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Date: 6/12/2018 5:17:00 PM
Hello Danny, A very powerful rhyme reflection here on "The Sum of a Life." Death is a topic I have written my fair share of poetry on. Death and our eventual walk into the Great Beyond and the Metaphysical Unknown are part and parcel of the finite reality of each of us as mortal beings in this world. When it comes my time, I just hope I can take a couple shots (or many shots) of fine whiskey before departing this moral coil. Your last six verses say it all. Superb!! A FAVE!! Best Always, Gary
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Date: 6/12/2018 12:25:00 PM
Whoa! A very rife reflection, indeed--rife with the realization of life's disappointment in the belated knowledge that all we had was time... Sage philosophizing, Daniel! ~ Gershon
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Date: 6/10/2018 3:24:00 PM
Truer words never spoken Danny, I get the sense that you are doing well, glad to see it, and I must say the quality of this rhyme is very good, glad to see you getting lot's of comments on this one. Take care dear poet!
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Date: 6/4/2018 10:59:00 PM
Philosophical reflection on life ... Nicely penned ... I may not agree but did read with genuine glee ...
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Date: 6/3/2018 7:15:00 PM
Hello Daniel … you summed up the story of life in two verses extremely well. And naturally really well written and rhymed - thank you Daniel;Lindsay
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Date: 5/29/2018 1:49:00 AM
Wow...my sentiments exactly. I've always been overwhelmed by thoughts of death and dying. I think it has hampered my ability to live life to the fullest. Thanks for this lovely reminder, so aptly written. Hugs
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Date: 5/29/2018 8:57:00 AM
Thank you, Eileen. It seems you and I have more in common than a love of poetry:) Death is never too far away. I have come very close more than a few times.
Date: 5/28/2018 12:59:00 PM
Pretty succinct summation, Daniel. I love "We add peace, subtract strife/Find the sum of a life/Discover we've love left for giving". That sort of makes it all worthwhile...doesn't it?
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Date: 5/28/2018 1:15:00 PM
Indeed! I appreciate your kind comments and your support, Jim. No matter how much love we give away, there is always more where it came from. God bless:)
Date: 5/28/2018 7:25:00 AM
This fine, realistic poem made me cry-- my newest favorite, Daniel! Janice
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Date: 5/28/2018 11:02:00 AM
I am sorry I made you cry, Janice. You have such a tender heart:) God bless and thank you for your support.
Date: 5/27/2018 11:00:00 AM
Oh, this came from your core and it is powerfully raw as well as relatable. A Wow therapy write that spilled pieces of you onto the paper. I could go PollyAnna and remind you to live in the moment, look back never and forward not, but these feelings are real, I've had them and I get them. Changing your channel is a necessary eventuality because perspective is all - but that's not what this poem is about. Well done. Poetry hugs ... CayCay
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Date: 5/27/2018 8:21:00 PM
Hey girl! So nice to see your lovely icon on my page:) Thank you for friendly visits. Hoping you are well:)
Date: 5/27/2018 7:47:00 AM
I thoroughly enjoyed reading your thought provoking poem Daniel I can certainly relate, so many dreams and plans then we find it’s to late, well written. :))
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Date: 5/27/2018 8:19:00 PM
Thank you, Roy. Just simply isn't enough time. I appreciate your time and your support, my friend.
Date: 5/27/2018 1:08:00 AM
Deep writing about real life... expressed so well, making one think and feel. A fave. Well done.
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Date: 5/27/2018 8:19:00 PM
Thank you, Susan. It's always my pleasure when you visit:) Has it been hot enough for you?
Date: 5/25/2018 5:33:00 PM
you seize the day with the glory of your word-pictures, daniel... greeat write!..huggs
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Date: 5/27/2018 8:17:00 PM
Hello nette:) Thank you, Hoping you are well.
Date: 5/25/2018 2:46:00 PM
Really, really well done Daniel, look up and the days become years, great line, all my best my friend...
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Date: 5/27/2018 8:17:00 PM
Hello Charlie:) Thank you for dropping by to read and comment. How are you? Is it hot enough for you yet? I think summer bullied spring to leave early, here.
Date: 5/24/2018 4:13:00 PM
You summed life up very capably, Danny...so many ups and down, so much left undone, so much wasted time...so much pain, too! Regards // paul
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Date: 5/27/2018 8:15:00 PM
Thank you, Paul. I appreciate your kindness. It's always a pleasure to look up and see you visiting:) Be well!
Date: 5/23/2018 11:47:00 AM
You are right Daniel, well said.. Hope all is well with you.
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Date: 5/27/2018 8:14:00 PM
Hello old friend. Thank you and yes I am fine. How about yourself? How are the bunnies doing?
Date: 5/22/2018 9:16:00 PM
Much truth and bitter beauty here, and just a marvelous write ... I so relate to these superbly-crafted words, my friend. Blessings!
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Date: 5/27/2018 8:12:00 PM
Thank you Greg. I always appreciate your time and support:)
Date: 5/22/2018 12:53:00 PM
It seems that you are a little down DT. Have a glass of wine on me.
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Date: 5/27/2018 8:11:00 PM
Thank you Pashang,old friend. You know I don't drink alcohol but I appreciate the thought:) No, I'm not down suprisingly:)
Date: 5/21/2018 6:37:00 AM
Wisely said in a nutshell, Daniel...that sums it all up...love and light...^WW^
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Date: 5/22/2018 8:19:00 AM
Thank you, Wingman. Hoping you are well my friend. It's always a pleasure:)
Date: 5/20/2018 9:58:00 AM
This poem was beautiful, Daniel and my age , I can relate to it, I'm going to copy this for prosperity!
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Date: 5/22/2018 8:18:00 AM
Thank you, Ralph. The highest compliment of all:) So nice to see you again.
Date: 5/18/2018 10:50:00 AM
A nice timeline of life, Daniel.. I guess we need our downs to appreciate the ups in our time travel into the future … Thank you for reading " The Old Elf Poet Awaits At the River's Edge ".. hugs Eve ~`*
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Date: 5/22/2018 8:18:00 AM
Thank you, Eve. Hoping you are well:)
Date: 5/17/2018 4:49:00 PM
I loved the analogy to math, what we add and subtract. this is a very clever and well thought out poem, Danny. Keep up the good work!
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Date: 5/22/2018 8:17:00 AM
Thank you, Andrea. I appreciate your kindness:)
Date: 5/17/2018 3:20:00 PM
Deep and well written Daniel...I like the flow of the rhyme :) Life may be unforgiving...but HE is not...depending on what you believe of course :)
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Date: 5/22/2018 8:16:00 AM
Thank you, Chris. I appreciate your kindness and your support.
Date: 5/17/2018 1:04:00 PM
Yes sir, that about sums it up! I love those last three lines!
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Date: 5/22/2018 8:15:00 AM
Thank you, Dean. Wonderful to see you again.
Date: 5/17/2018 6:51:00 AM
I hope you don't mind DT. This poem of yours inspired my muse. I am entering a poem and making reference to being inspired by this one of yours :)
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Date: 5/17/2018 9:40:00 AM
You know I don't mind. I am honored. Love:)
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