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The Storm Water Pipe

The storm water pipe gaped into open air from an embankment where it surfaced from underground. The opening was a little smaller than my childhood height and they said it stretched a mile or more but nobody knew for sure. A danger sign warned against entry saying the pipe was subject to sudden flooding - a protective grate had a hole big enough to crawl through. I would pause at its mouth and stare into a claustrophobic dark. Hunched, heart racing, I monkey walked my way in, listening out for water, breathing in the dank air. Deeper and deeper I would go until courage left me when the light from the entrance faded and all went black. Hell was there. It still is.

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Date: 7/10/2025 3:09:00 PM
Hello Paul, so perfectly shown that childhood urge to test boundaries, to peer into the unknown, even when every instinct is screaming to turn back. I love how you build the tension and the warning sign, the grate with just enough space to slip through, the air growing dank and heavy, the light fading behind you. It’s a journey not just into the pipe but into the heart of fear itself. Summer Blessings, My Friend, Daniel
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Paul Willason
Date: 7/12/2025 6:21:00 AM
Thankyou Daniel, thoughtful and marvellously forensic comments as usual...always enjoy hearing from you. A few layers in this poem. Very much appreciate that you gave it some time. Take care my friend, Paul
Date: 7/10/2025 7:53:00 AM
For such a time as this. You captured the fear…of darkness…of flooding…of strange spaces…of death…of tragic death like the one in Texas.
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Paul Willason
Date: 7/12/2025 6:16:00 AM
Hi Kim, Indeed this poem enters the darker regions, both internal and external. Thankyou for your comments, the feedback is very much appreciated my friend.makes a difference. Regards, Paul

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