The Sound of Buzzing

the sound of buzzing announcing his intention a sharp reminder not to ignore a warning ice melting down my shirt sleeve

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/1/2015 11:16:00 PM

wish I had gotten its meaning!! I finally saw what you wrote down here for me. thanks for the explanation on the last line.

Thomas Kourkoulis

Date: 3/26/2015 8:39:00 PM

Ouch! I helped a friend keep honeybees. Sure taught me to respect my little insect friends.

Paul Callus

Date: 3/26/2015 12:49:00 PM

Congrats on your win, Barbara! Somehow this one escaped my attention before. Can feel the sharp sting! When that happens to me I cut an onion in half and rub it on the effected spot; usually it works. All the best. // paul

James Peranteau

Date: 3/22/2015 4:41:00 PM

Owch ! ;)....awesome write dear poet, and congrats on the win ! Have a blessed Sunday.....much love, james

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 3/22/2015 1:58:00 PM

BARBARA, Congratulations on your awesome TANKA 2 win Always & Forever <3 Luv ~LINDA~

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/21/2015 9:50:00 PM

oh my, Barbara.I am so curious to understand this one. Sorry I put it low. I just like to know the meanings of the ones I place high. I see PD thinks it is a bee buzzing. But because you said "sharp reminder" in line 3, I was thinking that the person was being attacked by a power saw!! Or maybe someone had gotten frozen and had to have his clothes sawed off? Please soupmail me what was in your mind! It sure was intriguing and I am pleased how you formatted your lines.

Barbara Gorelick
Date: 3/21/2015 10:13:00 PM

Yes, I had a bee in mind and putting ice on the sting.. Oh well, sorry it wasn't clear.. Barbara

Viv Wigley

Date: 3/18/2015 1:27:00 AM

The definition of fear- hearing a buzzing sound when you're half way through a good sit down on the toilet. Great write, Barbara. Viv x

Hannington Mumo

Date: 3/18/2015 12:18:00 AM

A great piece. Keep it up. A 7...

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 3/18/2015 12:11:00 AM

those bee stings are no joke, enjoyed your write tonight... p.d. was here :)