The Soloist

THE SOLOIST The Universe sang itself into being, and we are one of it's songs. It laughed mischievously at black holes, that were hidden in massive throngs. It spun a pirouette of galaxies, danced in dizzy, joyful bliss. It cast a spell of clustered stars, and gave us our first kiss. It made the wanderers to travel, and stretched itself in time and space. It called the Earth, all blue and wet, and made the Milky Way our place. It named immense and diminutive things, it marked in secret scale. From shooting stars, to Mayfly wings, both in particle and cosmic braille. All mute and quiet deep in space, and earthbound songs usurping. Exploding stars we could not hear, but heard the crickets chirping. In everywhere and anytime, it shows us something new. We shake our heads because we know, the Soloist's not through. by Edlynn Nau

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Paul Callus

Date: 11/17/2015 6:01:00 PM

Definitely...this soloist is not through! There is more to compose; hopefully this pen of yours will willingly aid in the process. Love the rhyme; I notice that you kept an irregular syllable count which I presume was intentional, probably to avoid tedious monotone. ~ Regards // paul

Edlynn Nau
Date: 11/17/2015 6:53:00 PM

Absolutely intententional! The Soloist does not fancy regular anything. Not the nature of creation but more the nature of the creatures that live within nature & so fond of predictiblity. I did try an exact count & it made the poem more dry and slow. I was able to make the thing take a few sauté hops if I went with an irregular count & stress. Delighted you noticed.

Caycay Jennings

Date: 9/3/2015 10:48:00 PM

Incredible poem, I enjoyed the read very much ... CayCay

Edlynn Nau
Date: 9/4/2015 1:10:00 AM

Thank you so much CayCay! This came from a very long...just TERRIBLE poem, called "Cognitive Universe". I critiqued it after putting it away for a month and gave it to two trusted poets. They both said that it was awful & is two (if not three) poems. It was too pedantic. They told me to put it away and try again. I didn't need to b/c I had already put it away for a month. I'm thinking of posting that lemon so people can see how my process may mean a total rewrite, how I can write some p-r-e-t-t-y bad stuff. I WANTED to write a poem about the Universe thinking about itself. "The Soloist" is that Universe and the total rewrite.

Mike Martin

Date: 8/25/2015 1:30:00 PM

Very Nice! I love the beat. I would swap galaxies with stars and drop clustered.

Edlynn Nau
Date: 9/4/2015 12:52:00 AM

Why? What's the reasoning...you said what to do but not why?

Edlynn Nau
Date: 8/25/2015 8:59:00 PM

Hmmm! Interest change but that gives me Stars twice in the same verse. I might replace custard stars with what they are:constellations! Rather lengthy in syallables though! I will have to play with it to tweak. Does the rhythm seem off there?

Frank Black Blacharczyk

Date: 8/14/2015 3:18:00 PM

Very nice. Nice imager and a nice flow

Edlynn Nau
Date: 8/14/2015 4:30:00 PM

Thank you Frank. I will be visiting your poetry later today! Getting the mundane task done first :-o

Casarah Nance

Date: 8/14/2015 2:26:00 PM

Very interesting...I like that cosmic braille--neat

Edlynn Nau
Date: 8/14/2015 4:32:00 PM

Thanks Casarah! I always love when other poets picks out word phrases and favorite sentences. It helps to know if the painting with words gets the picture across. That feedback is particularly useful!