The Sky Turned Black

the sky turned black 

when I come home
do not look in my eyes
for  I  am no longer there

wandered away some where
some time ago, not sure
what you see is a replica of me

trained to kill, I was broken 
into pieces then put together
but some things are missing

they forgot to return a bit or two
before I returned, now 
when I look in the mirror, 
who is there?

Copyright © | Year Posted 2017



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Date: 11/11/2017 4:14:00 PM
Oh so deep, so meaningful, you drive your point home with such esteem..love this.
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Patricia Cresswell
Date: 11/11/2017 5:43:00 PM
Thank you Harry and welcome to my home.
Date: 11/11/2017 11:34:00 AM
Deep, deep. I love your poems.
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Patricia Cresswell
Date: 11/11/2017 2:41:00 PM
Thank you Sunny One.
Date: 11/11/2017 9:14:00 AM
What use is war? Nothing at all... You created the deep emotions of veterans returning.. who get very little help these days..
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Patricia Cresswell
Date: 11/11/2017 9:44:00 AM
Silent One in general we have things backward, we celebrate these you warriors when they are going and ignore them when they return. it is are enduring disgrace. Thank you for understanding the poem.
Date: 11/11/2017 8:38:00 AM
Stunning! Would that our nationalistic make-war psyche could be stunned into change:-( Powerful poetry indeed. ~ john
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Patricia Cresswell
Date: 11/11/2017 9:04:00 AM
John my poetry on the subject of war and all of its aberrations is meant to stun people into thought then hopefully action. If not it is blowing in the wind.
Date: 11/10/2017 9:56:00 PM
Nice delivery. Delightfully sad.
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Patricia Cresswell
Date: 11/10/2017 10:00:00 PM
Thanks Line. Guess my mood is rather obvious. I do not think war solves problems.
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