The Sky Is Crying

lover #1 haiku:

           falling snow

                flowing like angry tears

                   the sky is crying



lover #2 tanka

        moods dependant on 

           whim of fickle nature

                foolishly expressed

        even storms are beautiful

           when they are shared by two.





for Debbie Guzzi's "Love Talks" contest
Copyright © | Year Posted 2011

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Fraser Avatar
March 10, 2011 at 7:10 AM
Your title made me start singing the "Stevie Ray Vaughn" songs with the same title. Good luck in Debbie's contest with this lovely poem Francine....:)
Dietrich Avatar
March 7, 2011 at 10:52 PM
Hey, this is really cool, Francine. which is the guy and which is the girl? I was guessing the girl gave the haiku message but now I think maybe I am wrong! Good luck in the contest and thanks again for the HM!
Sweetheart Avatar
March 5, 2011 at 4:53 AM
Lovely words for this contest Francine ..good luck my friend.. though I think no caps for your title .. in this one .. check with Debbie as this is what she told me..luv.. great dialogue ...
Mehta Avatar
March 4, 2011 at 6:14 PM
Beautiful expression of the exchange, Francine
Locksley Avatar
March 4, 2011 at 6:05 PM
You did a great job with this theme Francine. The sky may be crying but the last two lines left me smiling. Good luck in the contest. Best to you, Diane
Devonshire Avatar
March 4, 2011 at 5:29 PM
Oh, that's lovely and so true, Francine. Nature is fickle, but true love never falters. It's really fun to snuggle with a loved one and watch lightning as a storm rages outside. Best wishes in Deb's contest! Love, Carolyn
Konos Avatar
March 4, 2011 at 5:23 PM
Very good...best wishes for the contest...
Kendrick Avatar
March 4, 2011 at 4:37 PM
Reads like a winner..Good luck in the great contest...Sara
Dietrich Avatar
March 4, 2011 at 4:36 PM
wow, I love how you did yours! Particularly the way the man answered!! (second is for the man, right? )Maybe not!!
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