Get Your Premium Membership

The Shout Whisperer

As I climbed up the ladder backwards I somehow ended up at the bottom I whispered in the ear of summer until she turned into autumn When my mirror revealed smooth skin All I could feel was every rough crack As I moved intently towards the front I was surprised to find myself at the back The years had somehow become minutes My place in the sun, became darker than night I thought there might be comfort in darkness Yet, I couldn't sleep with that dark kinda light I had hoped that life's music would calm me Instead I became more nervous then hell When I screamed at the top of my lungs People's ears, were too deaf to hear me yell As I thought my mind turned toward feeling What felt broken became fixed in it's way All of my worries flowed into my freedom Within my nonsense I had something to say So I decided to speak in a whisper The people asked me not to shout What seemed like a very sad story Was not at all what it was all about Shades of grey flow into many colours In the end that's how beginnings turn out

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015




Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem.

Please Login to post a comment

Date: 11/5/2015 7:30:00 AM
I love when you write like this, Rick! Clever and poignant and musical. I can practically see your muse cooking up a storm of creative imagery! A fave for me.
Login to Reply
Lamoureux Avatar
Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/5/2015 7:42:00 AM
That's quite the image you have painted dear one. Thanks for this thoughtful visit. ;0)
Date: 10/6/2015 11:38:00 PM
I loved it, and this could describe a day in the life of me!. This tells me to not necessarily do the first thing that comes to my mind. Have patience and things will work out. Great write!
Login to Reply
Lamoureux Avatar
Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/7/2015 9:47:00 AM
So true.
Date: 10/5/2015 8:28:00 AM
Excellent write Richard. When in deep thought, things we worry about often get fixed in the way. I love this. Best wishes. RP
Login to Reply
Lamoureux Avatar
Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/7/2015 9:47:00 AM
Thanks Rainbow.
Date: 10/4/2015 8:25:00 PM
Charmaine said it wonderfully below Richard. My thoughts mirror hers. A very nice write. Cleverly written.
Login to Reply
Lamoureux Avatar
Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/5/2015 7:50:00 AM
Thanks once again my friend.
Date: 10/4/2015 10:17:00 AM
I love the positive message -Yes every experience that makes us shout or yell in discomfort and pain, by time will turn into a soft whisper , that everyone listens too, a rainbow beyond those shades of grey. Amazing
Login to Reply
Lamoureux Avatar
Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/5/2015 7:50:00 AM
Thanks Charmaine, I am pleased you enjoyed it.
Date: 10/4/2015 9:38:00 AM
This is a stunning write my very dear friend, Richard. It's my pleasure to read it tonight. Thank you so much for sharing! Thank you so much as well for your precious time reading my poems and for your warm greetings on my birthday. God bless! love lots and big hugs, Leonora
Login to Reply
Lamoureux Avatar
Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/5/2015 7:49:00 AM
Thanks Leonora, I hope you had a wonderful birthday.
Date: 10/4/2015 8:45:00 AM
Magnificent piece of poetry. When you start out to write a masterpiece, you end up with a masterpiece.
Login to Reply
Lamoureux Avatar
Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/5/2015 7:48:00 AM
Thanks Scott, what a nice thing to say.
Date: 10/4/2015 6:40:00 AM
You are so creative; leading the reader into a maze of words where we don't want to escape. I especially love the next to last stanza...perfect!
Login to Reply
Lamoureux Avatar
Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/4/2015 7:54:00 AM
Monterey! So glad to see you back!
Date: 10/3/2015 9:25:00 PM
Yet again my friend I marvel at your creativity and poetic zeal. Coming full circle was a most brilliant stroke methinks. A7
Login to Reply
Lamoureux Avatar
Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/4/2015 7:55:00 AM
Thanks my friend Robert.
Date: 10/3/2015 2:06:00 PM
lovely, the way you think... I can feel the power of your thoughts.. loved this one, adding to my fav list
Login to Reply
Lamoureux Avatar
Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/4/2015 7:59:00 AM
Thanks Dew, I appreciate your visit. Drop by any time.
Date: 10/3/2015 9:25:00 AM
Some of these stanzas are especially awesome and inspiring - the first two blow me away. I don't know if I've read you before, but now I'm off to read more ... CayCay
Login to Reply
Lamoureux Avatar
Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/4/2015 8:00:00 AM
Hi Cay Cay, I'm so pleased you are enjoying my writing.
Date: 10/2/2015 6:04:00 PM
Dear Richard I really enjoyed the power within this write of yours, it is a marvelous masterpiece to me, love the imagery of excellence, all I can say is just wow, cheri
Login to Reply
Lamoureux Avatar
Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/3/2015 8:17:00 AM
Good morning and thanks for your thoughtful visit Cherl.
Date: 10/2/2015 11:34:00 AM
Wow! I thoroughly enjoyed this clever, fun rhyme! A7
Login to Reply
Lamoureux Avatar
Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/2/2015 11:46:00 AM
Sorry to make you sad, as someone much older than you there is much to look forward too. I have enjoyed my forties and now approaching my middle fifties I could not be happier.
Lamoureux Avatar
Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/2/2015 11:43:00 AM
Thanks Anna, the first line popped into my head and the rest of the poem wrote itself.
Date: 10/2/2015 11:15:00 AM
Good morning Richard, this is deep, kind of makes me feel kind of sad, knowing time is a master at its own making. However, the ending of the poem has goodness to a new beginning... Enjoyed. LINDA
Login to Reply
Lamoureux Avatar
Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/2/2015 11:47:00 AM
Oops Linda, my response jumped up one spot to Anna.
Date: 10/2/2015 9:49:00 AM
Opposites coming together in such unusual ways, Richard. The title is an intriguing illustration of that content of the poem. Hugs
Login to Reply
Lamoureux Avatar
Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/2/2015 10:14:00 AM
Thanks and hugs back.
Date: 10/2/2015 9:17:00 AM
Love this opposition. Great poem full of clear imagery. My kind of thing. J
Login to Reply
Lamoureux Avatar
Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/2/2015 9:33:00 AM
Thanks Jennifer, just having a bit of fun bending thoughts.
Date: 10/2/2015 9:04:00 AM
Beautiful!!!I love how you voiced the feeling of desolation in the beginning and ended the poem with a ray of hope.lovely.
Login to Reply
Lamoureux Avatar
Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/2/2015 9:32:00 AM
Thanks Miraj!