Richard Lamoureux Poet Rhyme

The Shout Whisperer

As I climbed up the ladder backwards
I somehow ended up at the bottom
I whispered in the ear of summer
until she turned into autumn

When my mirror revealed smooth skin
All I could feel was every rough crack
As I moved intently towards the front
I was surprised to find myself at the back

The years had somehow become minutes 
My place in the sun, became darker than night
I thought there might be comfort in darkness
Yet, I couldn't sleep with that dark kinda light

I had hoped that life's music would calm me
Instead I became  more nervous then hell
When I screamed at the top of my lungs 
People's ears, were too deaf to hear me yell

As I thought my mind turned toward feeling
What felt broken became fixed in it's way
All of my worries flowed into my freedom
Within my nonsense I had something to say

So I decided to speak in a whisper
The people asked me not to shout
What seemed like a very sad story
Was not at all what it was all about
Shades of grey flow into many colours 
In the end that's how beginnings turn out

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Heather Ober November 5, 2015 at 7:30 AM I love when you write like this, Rick! Clever and poignant and musical. I can practically see your muse cooking up a storm of creative imagery! A fave for me. Richard Lamoureux November 5, 2015 at 7:42 AM That's quite the image you have painted dear one. Thanks for this thoughtful visit. ;0)

Brian Baumgarn October 6, 2015 at 11:38 PM I loved it, and this could describe a day in the life of me!. This tells me to not necessarily do the first thing that comes to my mind. Have patience and things will work out. Great write! Richard Lamoureux October 7, 2015 at 9:47 AM So true.

Rainbow Promise October 5, 2015 at 8:28 AM Excellent write Richard. When in deep thought, things we worry about often get fixed in the way. I love this. Best wishes. RP Richard Lamoureux October 7, 2015 at 9:47 AM Thanks Rainbow.

Michael Tor October 4, 2015 at 8:25 PM Charmaine said it wonderfully below Richard. My thoughts mirror hers. A very nice write. Cleverly written. Richard Lamoureux October 5, 2015 at 7:50 AM Thanks once again my friend.

Charmaine Chircop October 4, 2015 at 10:17 AM I love the positive message -Yes every experience that makes us shout or yell in discomfort and pain, by time will turn into a soft whisper , that everyone listens too, a rainbow beyond those shades of grey. Amazing Richard Lamoureux October 5, 2015 at 7:50 AM Thanks Charmaine, I am pleased you enjoyed it.

Len Gasun October 4, 2015 at 9:38 AM This is a stunning write my very dear friend, Richard. It's my pleasure to read it tonight. Thank you so much for sharing! Thank you so much as well for your precious time reading my poems and for your warm greetings on my birthday. God bless! love lots and big hugs, Leonora Richard Lamoureux October 5, 2015 at 7:49 AM Thanks Leonora, I hope you had a wonderful birthday.

Scott Thirtyseven October 4, 2015 at 8:45 AM Magnificent piece of poetry. When you start out to write a masterpiece, you end up with a masterpiece. Richard Lamoureux October 5, 2015 at 7:48 AM Thanks Scott, what a nice thing to say.

Monterey Sirak October 4, 2015 at 6:40 AM You are so creative; leading the reader into a maze of words where we don't want to escape. I especially love the next to last stanza...perfect! Richard Lamoureux October 4, 2015 at 7:54 AM Monterey! So glad to see you back!

Robert Lindley October 3, 2015 at 9:25 PM Yet again my friend I marvel at your creativity and poetic zeal. Coming full circle was a most brilliant stroke methinks. A7 Richard Lamoureux October 4, 2015 at 7:55 AM Thanks my friend Robert.

Adri Dew October 3, 2015 at 2:06 PM lovely, the way you think... I can feel the power of your thoughts.. loved this one, adding to my fav list Richard Lamoureux October 4, 2015 at 7:59 AM Thanks Dew, I appreciate your visit. Drop by any time.

CayCay Godwin October 3, 2015 at 9:25 AM Some of these stanzas are especially awesome and inspiring - the first two blow me away. I don't know if I've read you before, but now I'm off to read more ... CayCay Richard Lamoureux October 4, 2015 at 8:00 AM Hi Cay Cay, I'm so pleased you are enjoying my writing.

Cherl Dunn October 2, 2015 at 6:04 PM Dear Richard I really enjoyed the power within this write of yours, it is a marvelous masterpiece to me, love the imagery of excellence, all I can say is just wow, cheri Richard Lamoureux October 3, 2015 at 8:17 AM Good morning and thanks for your thoughtful visit Cherl.

Anna Hopper October 2, 2015 at 11:34 AM Wow! I thoroughly enjoyed this clever, fun rhyme! A7 Richard Lamoureux October 2, 2015 at 11:46 AM Sorry to make you sad, as someone much older than you there is much to look forward too. I have enjoyed my forties and now approaching my middle fifties I could not be happier. Richard Lamoureux October 2, 2015 at 11:43 AM Thanks Anna, the first line popped into my head and the rest of the poem wrote itself.

Poet Destroyer A October 2, 2015 at 11:15 AM Good morning Richard, this is deep, kind of makes me feel kind of sad, knowing time is a master at its own making. However, the ending of the poem has goodness to a new beginning... Enjoyed. LINDA Richard Lamoureux October 2, 2015 at 11:47 AM Oops Linda, my response jumped up one spot to Anna.

Eileen Manassian October 2, 2015 at 9:49 AM Opposites coming together in such unusual ways, Richard. The title is an intriguing illustration of that content of the poem. Hugs Richard Lamoureux October 2, 2015 at 10:14 AM Thanks and hugs back.

Hidden Sister October 2, 2015 at 9:17 AM Love this opposition. Great poem full of clear imagery. My kind of thing. J Richard Lamoureux October 2, 2015 at 9:33 AM Thanks Jennifer, just having a bit of fun bending thoughts.

Miraj Raha October 2, 2015 at 9:04 AM Beautiful!!!I love how you voiced the feeling of desolation in the beginning and ended the poem with a ray of hope.lovely. Richard Lamoureux October 2, 2015 at 9:32 AM Thanks Miraj!