Home » Poems » Gary Radice » The Secret Drawer

Gary Radice | + Follow Poet |

The Secret Drawer

Poet's Notes

(Show)

Become a Premium Member and post notes and photos about your poem like Gary Radice.

Originally published 7th September 2022

Image by Clker-Free-Vector-Images from Pixabay

This poem was placed 1st in the "Any Poem" contest sponsored by Silent One (Judged 3rd February 2024)

This Time Last Month A customer Opens door Bell lets out two rings That smell of books Telescopes Globes and other things. Travel guides Atlases Maps strewn everywhere Customer Breaks fourth wall Speaks as if you're there: "I got upset when I first heard this shop was closing down. I don't have any reason now to pass this way to town. I mean - Just look! It's beautiful! I don't know where to start The architecture oozes charm ..It's retro future art!" Whispers "While the owner's in the back I think it's fair to say Age and life have not been kind He struggles every day. His shop's been here for many years He's run it all alone I've heard he's had to sell it though and this has been his home. He never talks about his wife who left and took their son. Rumours are he liked his drink but somehow battled on. His wife then died just after that - An accident somewhere. His son was only very young and spent some time in care. Son went to jail but studied too and now might live quite near - With a suit and tie and new cell phone he's been seen not far from here. The owner spied his son first time in years just days ago in a plush, expensive company car but that is all I know." Owner appears Front of shop As the wall clock chimes Customer Pays for book: 'Prey To Opus' Rhymes * Both smile at title Shake of hands A joke and last goodbye Shop now closed Owner stares Tear appears in eye. One Hour Later Lots of cash Photos. Bible In a secret drawer up top Behind some boxes Piled up high Hidden back of shop. Old shop owner Takes out photos Days of love and fun. Sad but smiles Happy times. His wife himself and son. Puts photos back Locks secret drawer Writes note and signs himself Front of shop Both key and note Placed upon a shelf. Today Shutters down 'Shop For Sale' Working all alone Man in suit Job to do Talks on new cell phone: "This shop would not be out of place in a home like Charing Cross He ran it like a hobby though and ignored its mounting loss. There's lots of boxes piled up high on the floor of the back room but nothing else - Report is done. I'll get it typed up soon. Oh and.. I've found a signed note and a key left lying on a shelf I think the scribbled writing says: 'It's time to find yourself'. I'll have a think when I get back Right now I've had enough I'll file these under 'Now Deceased' with all his other stuff. Some cases that we have are sad but moreso this because it hurts to think he died alone whoever this guy was." Job now done Sets alarm Taps in digit code Suit tie and phone Plush company car Drives off down the road. ~ ~ ~ * 'Prey To Opus' Rhymes - A book that contains a secret inside..

Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem. Negative comments will result your account being banned.

Please Login to post a comment

Linda Alice Fowler

Date: 1/5/2024 8:18:00 AM

I remember reading this before Gary. I was enchanted then, and have not lost that upon reading again. Charming! Congratulations! :)

Gary Radice
Date: 1/5/2024 9:01:00 AM

Hi Linda! Thanks for coming back for more :) I pulled the original thinking it was too long but republished it changing the title and adding another 4 lines after having second thoughts. I tend to do that sort of things with my poems. :) All the best to you and your family for '24. Cheers - Gary

Silent One

Date: 1/4/2024 12:37:00 PM

I loved this narrative, it is a poignant exploration of the life and eventual passing of the owner of a quaint and cherished bookshop. The use of vivid details, such as the smell of books, telescopes, and globes, sets the scene and immerses the reader in the unique atmosphere of the shop. The fourth wall is broken as the customer addresses the reader directly, creating a personal connection and drawing them into the unfolding story... I remember when a childhood aquarium closed, I rember the

Gary Radice
Date: 1/4/2024 9:31:00 PM

Thanks SO, I'm glad you like this. I envisaged this as 'a stage play inside a poem' so felt it was important to set the scene and hopefully take the reader along with me. What it 'suffers for' in length (many don't read long poems) I hope it makes up for in atmosphere and story. This 'The Hitch' and 'Wilderness' are my 3 long poems but probably the ones I'm most proud of. Thanks for the chance to air it again. Cheers - Gary

Silent One
Date: 1/4/2024 12:37:00 PM

owner died and I always wondered what happened to all he fish... Congratulations on your first place in the contest..

Kai Michael Neumann

Date: 11/16/2022 1:09:00 AM

Wow, that is an opus. Well done. I enjoyed reading your poem. Thank you for sharing it. Kind wishes, Kai

Gary Radice
Date: 11/16/2022 2:01:00 AM

Thanks Kai. It's gone through a few changes in its lifetime but I'm finally happy with this version. Glad you enjoyed it. Speaking of 'Opus' did you solve the riddle? 'Prey To Opus' Rhymes - A book that contains a secret inside. :) Cheers - Gary

David Smith

Date: 10/25/2022 12:26:00 PM

Plenty of meat in this one Gary. A reminder I think of how a secret drawer of memories can keep one soldiering on. Unfortunately today too many have no secret drawers and are signing off early. It does not help either that few have contact with those who demonstrate courage in the face of adversity. Though there are signs that attitudes are changing all be it slowly. One of your best. Well crafted. A cracking yarn and a timely reminder to not take what we have for granted. Thank you David in NZ

Gary Radice
Date: 10/26/2022 9:01:00 AM

Thanks so much David. Great comments. Thank you and read you soon. Cheers - Gary

Ann Peck

Date: 10/14/2022 3:19:00 PM

Reading comments below, I don't think anyone who knows your poetry would not read it because it's long! That was a tear- jerker, Gary, so beautifully done. Something about an old man alone has always made me sad.

Gary Radice
Date: 10/15/2022 4:00:00 AM

Hi Ann. I love writing the longer poems and for some reason they are usually the more poignant ones. Not sure why. (A favourite poem of mine I've written called "Wilderness" is testament to this.) I truly appreciate your artistic eye and comments Ann as always. Thank you. Cheers - Gary

Peter Rees

Date: 10/5/2022 5:02:00 AM

When’s the film coming out, Gary? Your well-told story certainly merits a film, full of so many possible interpretations. I really enjoyed it.

Gary Radice
Date: 10/5/2022 5:43:00 AM

Thanks Peter. I attempted to write this one like a stage play but in all honesty didn't think for one minute that it would get the applause it has got. I think it was Terry Flood (posted below) that once suggested in a blog that longer poems at The Soup can get the hits but once people see how long it is having clicked on it they don't often read it or comment on it. I agree 100% with him so it's always a bonus when Soupers like your good self do read and comment on the longer poems. Thanks again. Cheers - Gary

Terry Flood

Date: 10/1/2022 3:28:00 PM

Hmmm, cheers Gary. I’ve just complimented you on your succinct writings and you paste this up. I’ve missed half of Star Wars 38 now. Ha ha! Enjoyed this first time around and as much so now. These long writes can glean a disappointingly meagre response, so I’m glad folk have shown their appreciation. Terry

Gary Radice
Date: 10/2/2022 3:50:00 AM

:) Terry, I actually pulled this in 2020 on account of me thinking it was too long. So I sat down and played around with it only for it to re-surface recently...with an extra 4 lines. :) Cheers - Gary

Andrew John

Date: 9/12/2022 3:32:00 AM

It's a long story but well worth reading. I'll go back to it, too. Thanks.

Gary Radice
Date: 9/12/2022 7:21:00 AM

Thank you Andrew. It's always a bit of a gamble publishing a long poem here at The Soup as I know many prefer to read the shorter poems. Luckily, (and hopefully) though, poems like this do find an audience. Cheers - Gary

Speaks Volumes

Date: 9/11/2022 2:49:00 PM

Reading that, I feel like I have just read a 300 page book ! But Gary, you must write a sequel. I need to know who will use the key to open the drawer! How long will it be til some inquisitive soul, investigates and finds the lock that the key will open? Will it be his son? Your story has absolutely enthralled me. Your talent is amazing.

Gary Radice
Date: 9/12/2022 1:55:00 AM

Hi Wendy! Thanks so much for your lovely comments. I'm really pleased you enjoyed the read. Your idea of a sequel is a very interesting one but I'm probably inclined to leave things as they are. A sequel in my hands right now may turn out to be too contrived. I like to leave it up to the reader what may or may not happen. Great idea though. Thanks again. Cheers - Gary

Timothy Ray

Date: 9/11/2022 9:50:00 AM

an amazing short story that was done in verse....hmmmm what i see is a poet standing rather brilliantly in O. Henry's shadow and deserving such a notable reference...altho the more delightful i know a bookstore owner in a small town who is estranged from his son in a much different role...don't ya just love the magic life has in store for us!!!

Gary Radice
Date: 9/12/2022 1:51:00 AM

I'm honoured to be mentioned in the same sentence as O. Henry. That name has cropped up before from another souper too so I'm doubly honoured. Thank you Timothy. Life, indeed, as its own way of serving up magical surprises and coincidences. Great to hear from you. Cheers - Gary

Bill Baker

Date: 9/10/2022 4:02:00 PM

Wonderful poem, Gary. Very engaging. I enjoy reading it very much. Nice personal touch with the father/son senario. Thanks for sharing your thoughts through your enjoyable poetry my friend. A poet friend in Texas, Bill

Gary Radice
Date: 9/11/2022 4:01:00 AM

Thanks Bill. I love to tell stories but I'm never sure people want to listen to them :) It's lovely, therefore that you - and those who have commented below - stuck with it and enjoyed it - I really appreciate that. Cheers - Gary

John Watt

Date: 9/9/2022 1:51:00 PM

"And words speak volumes everywhere", to quote a favorite poet of mine from "The Bookshop Upstairs". You have created an amazing and touching narrative of father/son trajectories that keep missing one another until this bookshop closure intersects their paths. Heartbreaking that the son did not recognize the father... though maybe he will upon further investigation? I love the poignant nostalgia of the closing bookstore as well. This could easily serve as a catalyst for a screenplay, Gary. You have a brilliant gift for crafting intricate narratives into smoothly flowing poems. I sent you a soupmail about the riddle. Bravo, yet another remarkable invention from the mind and pen of Gary Radice - going in my faves, hope you find a contest you can enter this in so I can re-visit with congratulatory tidings. Cheers ~ John

Gary Radice
Date: 9/9/2022 11:15:00 PM

You're very kind John. Thank you. I love writing the longer narrative type of poems so it's always really pleasing to hear from people who have enjoyed them. I'm still not 100% happy with it..I'm nearly there.. I've struggled with the title and still am struggling. Thanks again. Oh, and Yes..spot on with Prey To Opus..with its secret 'inside'. :) John if you get the chance there are two other narratives of mine you might like: 'Wilderness' and 'A Hitch In Time'. I'm setting aside the next few days to catch up on my reading of yours and other Soupers' works. Cheers - Gary

Christopher Flaherty

Date: 9/7/2022 11:16:00 AM

I don't know where to start either Gary Apart from to say you hit the right key Bravo Sir truly worth waiting for

Christopher Flaherty
Date: 9/28/2022 12:01:00 PM

I wrote a poem called Optimistically Crushed Dreams Matinee Will you please read it Sir if you get a chance Ta thank you

Gary Radice
Date: 9/7/2022 11:44:00 PM

It's one of those poems that I've played around with up to this morning to be honest. I deleted it in 2020 because at the time I thought it too long and clumsy in parts. I've tidied it up a bit and feel it is more of a true representation of my work now..so here it is back again to stay. :) Christopher, I'll have a read of your work later today..Thanks for the read. Cheers - Gary

Christopher Flaherty

Date: 9/7/2022 11:16:00 AM

Some might say timeless

Gary Radice
Date: 9/7/2022 11:34:00 PM

Thanks for the read Christopher. Cheers - Gary

L Milton Hankins

Date: 9/7/2022 8:26:00 AM

Oh my, Gary! This story so tugged at my heartstrings. I loved the way you chose to tell it, too. Masterful. A FAVE. I knew from the beginning I could not stop reading until the very end. That is what I call compelling!

L Milton Hankins
Date: 9/7/2022 2:34:00 PM

I'm not familiar with this book, Gary. (lol) Not sure I understand except that its an anagram of, say, ... I don't want to give it away to anyone who's having trouble with it. (chuckling)

Gary Radice
Date: 9/7/2022 9:09:00 AM

Thank you Milt. I love to tell a story but when I begin writing I never know how it's going to end. I let my imagination drive it along the way. :) Have you worked out the 'secret' of the book 'Prey To Opus' yet? :) Cheers - Gary

Deb M

Date: 9/7/2022 3:41:00 AM

Oh wow Gary what a wonderful story that I didn’t want to end. Beautiful, nostalgic, touching and sad! Loved!!! Debx

Gary Radice
Date: 9/7/2022 7:37:00 AM

Thanks Deb. Judging by the amount of times I've amended this narrative I'm surprised it has an end! :) Ah, to be a poet.. :) Cheers - Gary